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2 Nov 2003, 8:23 AM
Liberate California! Not to poke fun. I think you have done very well with this piece.
Intense. Very.
Ha! The last line clinches all!
I salute you.
The theme is clear enough--but the individual examples are interpretable enough in the inverse that I am happy. Appreciated.
How on earth can fiction lie? How can you have your pudding if you don't eat yer meat If you don't eat your meat how can you have any pudding. To lie is to intentionally decive, fiction does not try to decive we've got documentaries, government reports and newspapers for that. That aside everything else seems in order especally line 13 & 14.
10/10.
Yep!
A masterpiss.
Great poem very original. I really like the structure too.
A bombastic ah, bomb? 12!!!
This would be awesome at a reading, a great performance poem. Great ideas and great rhythym.
You did a really good job on this poem. in my opinion poetry is not about making it rhyme, or making enough syllables... or enough lines.. or whatever. It's like what you did, making a statement and evoking an emotion. 10/10
Good job. You are a very good poet :) Deep thinker
Good poem, missy :) And as Sliver said, my the candle never go out. And may we continue to be able to nauseate Dark Angel ;) lol j/k
Those who are rejecting and disapproving your poem could in no way possibly be seeing it from your point of view, lil miss bratsy. Keep it up.
I remember when u sent this one to me. Remember to tell me when you post another one so I can come and see it :)
hehe yeah me and bratsy were workin on hers the other night... notta clue. Good poem :)
Good Job Electroman, I like this one. And my dad would LOVE this one. I am a Christian, but I am not a catholic... but I won't argue any of your viewpoints... I agree to disagree :)
hehehe that's what i keep tellin em I need!!!! Well here... I don't got no sleepin aids... but if u take some dayquil pill thingies.... it'll put ur mood up there... hehehehehehehehe (lol)
lol im running out of comments to give u people! But good job.