Great use of Polish in refrence to the Pope!

"-over" should be 'ever'.

A mocumentary

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Defitely put me into the moment. At first I was reluctant to read the thing, cuz it looked huge; in fact I was just going to type "just wanted you to know I'm working on it - notes to follow" - but I got sucked in. Now I want to go to china and stand up like a post.

A perfect moment for bedazzling drug use. Used, naturally, as a smoke screen. lol.

Jesus put me here.

cool wordplay

a nice flow of conciousness with some interesting allusions (you don't see "Septuagint" everyday). Not sure if you intended to use the apt "liquid lies" twice though. "over" works just fine, btw.

Well done.

persistant questions, and I appreciate the controlled structure.

yowee. I apologize for the previous comment--now, a month and a half later, I come back to this, and it strikes me as very, very "good". It's just a month and a half too old for me, that's all. :)

My commentating will come, yet! If I am free on Thursday, perhaps. But, until then, I must take pride in this poem, note the correlations to Francis' "Summons", and continue on...

Well, to leave this out would be too...conspicuous :), and so, I am here. I shall say simply that the internal stirrings this implies are not unknown to my precincts. And now, I shall leave the confessional, and go about my work. they really should have the option of point-fives when voting--I'm always caught between rounding up or rounding down.

You're right--it lacks the "sympathy" Mann spoke of, though to my own mind is very exact, very precise, and of wordings fine.

Whats this about? 10!

So in today I?ll live is probably the most exceptional line but the're all quite brilliant!

Ha ha ha aha h ahja ah fuckin excellent!

This might be seen more as a collection of thought on a single individual than a poem connecting directly together. In any case, some allusions: --The first two lines are from Wordsworth's "Ode" --Fariduddin Attar was a Persian mystic-poet of the Islamic tradition many centuries ago. One of his greatest works was called The Conference of the Birds-- about birds who set out to search for a King. After many trials on their travels, they discovered that each held the King within itself...in metaphor of God, the story takes on meaning beyond simple comprehension. --Telemachus, of course, is the son of Odysseus. --"take you to see ice": the first line of Marquez's 100Years: "Many years later, as he faced the firing squad, Colonel Aureliano Buendio remembered the distant day when his father took him to discover ice." This first line plunges the reader into the cyclic pattern of damnation and redemption which goes through the whole book. --horizontal/vertical axes: all of life being graphed on such a scale: the vertical axis holds all that is of insight and "depth", while the horizontal is plain experience. The correlation between true understanding and mere knowledge or information, if you will. --"This is my way--that yours": reference to: "...Say: "O ye who deny the truth! I do not worship that which you worship, and neither do you worship that which I worship. ... Unto you, your way, and to me, mine!"..."

I am left perplexed.