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on Night On the Town by razorgrin
17 Oct 2003, 5:36 PM
Once I went on a night out with the lads. We got so drunk that we stole a traffic cone. Can you believe it? Boy, that was a crazy night, I can tell you. Never again... ;-)
The Big Lowboskis know.
For another 10 quid i'll let you spank me with a blazing quail attached (impaled) to a stick.
I also hold a muave belt in cream of some young guy and french cooking.
The Cornling (ahchoo) by Somebody, dear god anybody!
Crouching under shucks
of Orville Redinbahchers'.
Soon his nuts will pop.
A jejunal act of devotion.
I kind of liked it, and often envision people missing me that passionately.
Better.
great poem, i can feel the emotion, keep up the good work 10
A fine poem with fine words and fine meanings.
One of those raped mountains looks back at me every time I look west. Probably a strip mine for coal, but with the same effect. Sucks huh?
Of course, I've come in after correction, but I like the theme. Sounds great to me. This is the reason I love this site. Thank Kaolin for me.
Was "the light at the end of the tunnel" a bullet firing? Such cowardice. I liked the last stanza best, the third one leaves me wondering if you just need to get out with your consoling friends - eat some weasel, tastes like wabbit. Nicole's a bitch - get over her - get on with it. Emotional otherwise.
I want to bookmark this! YES!!! On Flanders Field, But so much more. I'm going to read this a few more times, but for now 10.10.Love it.Lets hold discussion night on this. Why my stain, my son?Stain of blood, yes I understand. But the context really leaves that open. The internal images I get are the survivors coated with the blood of the wounded, as they try to help. I can't tell you how much I love this one. Thanks, Hope to see it as #1 real soon.
Youall are sick. SICK! have you no respect. Probably not.
I refuse to comment on the content, But I can feel every line. Well written.
some deleted user
on some deleted poem
17 Oct 2003, 8:48 PM
Great Poem "sliver" and i forgot to tell you on the 16th !! Sorry :) 28? wow..... :)
some deleted user
on some deleted poem
17 Oct 2003, 8:51 PM
Electroman: How come you are SO much better at this then me? Huh? great poem MORE MORE MORE :)
WHAT!!! May that candle never even dim> For both you, and me , And Him. May we forever feel that heat'
Let us never taste defeat. Love your work, It fills me with peace, May these exquisite writings never cease.