| Re: He doesn't love me by tuthaliash |
MacFrantic 129.82.152.112 |
1-Feb-07/7:44 PM |
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This is perfectly concise. Good suicide note.
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| Re: Pre Dance Jitters by Butterflywriter |
MacFrantic 129.82.152.112 |
1-Feb-07/7:47 PM |
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Could be better. I'm really not a fan of this simplistic image structure that takes so many lines to say very little.
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| Re: The Crossing by Hillarystep |
MacFrantic 129.82.152.112 |
1-Feb-07/7:49 PM |
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Apart from how showy and verbose this poem is, it is EXTREMELY well written and re-readable.
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| Re: Weep In Me by blueyes |
MacFrantic 129.82.152.112 |
1-Feb-07/7:51 PM |
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I like the last stanza, but isn't subtle enough.
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| Re: i don't recall the last 8 minutes by tralala42001 |
MacFrantic 129.82.152.112 |
1-Feb-07/7:52 PM |
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the first two lines are kind of useless. However, it winds down well.
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| Re: i am probably on my 7th shot of vodka by tralala42001 |
MacFrantic 129.82.152.112 |
1-Feb-07/7:55 PM |
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ugh...not your best. if you had read this, you probably would have made it more interesting in revision. if you did read it...why didn't you delete it?
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| Re: Me by berdabear |
MacFrantic 129.82.152.112 |
1-Feb-07/7:56 PM |
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Wonderful confession from 7th grader to 7th grader. Bravo!
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| Re: Drowning by wilco |
wilco 75.65.25.8 |
1-Feb-07/7:57 PM |
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OK, so I'm doing this thing for Fawm.org where you're supposed to write 14 songs in 28 days. This is the first one and I figured I might as well post it here too. I should have a demo up at some point if anyone cares to hear it.
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| Re: Drowning by wilco |
MacFrantic 129.82.152.112 |
1-Feb-07/8:00 PM |
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Hey! I have a poem with the same title. But this is totally different, and enjoyable. Well written, in fact. Loved "So Iâll just wrap myself in another cliché
of cheap bourbon and unlit cigarettes."
Also, S3's "your" should be "you're"
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| regarding some deleted poem... |
MacFrantic 129.82.152.112 |
1-Feb-07/8:02 PM |
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Not many poems on this subject. You get Windows Vista yet , Rock?
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| Re: Illumination by MacFrantic |
wilco 75.65.25.8 |
1-Feb-07/8:04 PM |
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I like this except for the middle stanza. That seems really forced to make the rhymes.
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| regarding some deleted poem... |
xxx 67.172.190.253 |
2-Feb-07/4:23 AM |
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I donât see or feel your music. Afire HUH? Almost as good as caressing your heart with a knife {your first post in, in case you donât remember, encased as you are in bliss}. You seem to be in love with the idea of pain.
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| regarding some deleted poem... |
Deimos 129.82.152.26 |
2-Feb-07/4:35 AM |
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| regarding some deleted poem... |
Deimos 129.82.152.26 |
2-Feb-07/4:41 AM |
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Wow, 1? Really? People don't really take this voting thing seriously. Here's a 10 for the 8 I'm awarding. Put it in the bin next to your other rankings.
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xxx 67.172.190.253 |
2-Feb-07/5:18 AM |
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This is your best post yet, a real hole slammer! Or is that slam dunker!
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Quarton 12.206.225.32 |
2-Feb-07/10:18 AM |
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Sorry for the the tirade. Actually, there is some good stuff being written at poemranker but this is definitely not one of them.
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| Re: David at the Firing by coldiron |
coldiron 71.109.28.85 |
2-Feb-07/10:50 AM |
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this poem was inspired by the accidental death of a 20 year old potter.
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| Re: Drowning by wilco |
Dovina 75.54.152.214 |
2-Feb-07/1:30 PM |
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Yeah, I get the first line - probably not the way you get it, but doesn't matter. Same for last line of S3. You've got some way to go before you get over saying the first line of S6.
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-=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. 63.212.164.89 |
2-Feb-07/3:25 PM |
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This scans excellently!!!111 And great use of "though!!" to rhyme with "head"!!!!111
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| regarding some deleted poem... |
xxx 67.172.190.253 |
3-Feb-07/6:28 AM |
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This is cute, but not even close to as good as your first post.
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