Ranger
on some deleted poem
2 May 2003, 12:48 PM
Thoughtful, contemplative. I like your poetry v. much. 9
mad as a jimeney cricket and interesting language
there has never been a better sentiment to death as this
"all i do is cry now
for i belong to a hell called yesterday"
magical in its depressing glory.
Some nice comments
perhaps more smart than insightful
Short, definitive, to the point...yet somewhat unfulfilling. I have grown to expect great things from a Gentleman such as yourself, especially with those Prawnes of which I now understand the truth about the Viet Cong.
Etc.
Alright, but not so good in places. Line 12 especially must go. 9-11 are quite nice.
Unfortunately this doesn't go anywhere though, it needs a purpose. Keep trying.
(I didn't give you the blue 3 by the way)
*sniff* Beautiful...so true to life. Fucking English cunts. Can't stand them.
Heh heh heh...made me laugh mucho, I see you have an 8 and a 10 so let the average roll. 9
A sweetly written piece. I know you must love to write but submitting 3 or 4 at a time won't get you that far. Contain your poetry and submit it in smaller, bitesize chunks and let us savour each morsel. Right I'm talking bollocks now, I'll shut up. Don't cheer.
Nice song anyway.
Hand towels and grout my friend. Thoses are the staples of life.
there was a moment at the corner of tibet and morocco that i would have asked him if he really
liked that crack whore
or was it just a carnival horse?
did the reverb sound quite so loud?
it must have
because it did.
nice from a leo, whales are safe.
what of a lion in a dog pit.
just finished a good read from clive barker.
ask me.
nice from a leo, whales are safe.
what of a lion in a dog pit.
just finished a good read from clive barker.
ask me.
richa
on he was the one i had written about before i met him 2 by rockinindividual
2 May 2003, 11:01 AM
flows well,
bit like a flashbulb memory but needs elaborating a bit I think with some insight
Definitely would work as a song although I feel that it started better than it finished. Is there music to it yet? Also rhyming me with be twice will not go down too great on this site. Aside from that though, I like it a lot!
Yes, sometimes chemistry goes well beyond chemicals. Well beyond God.
fyi in the world of truckin', the term (good buddy) carries a gay connotation. in the meantime, please send my appendage home.
my apologies sir.
going... Going.... GONZO!!!!!
Rhyming myfanwy with passage, betjemen would have been proud