It's a shame we're shamed.

a brilliant ennui.

Fugu!

to the point and succinct. great job

mmm...you kindof mixed me up in the last paragraph but other than that suprisingly good

some of the adjectives are drammatical and very unecessary....pretentious even. take some of them out before they drown out the rest of your thoughts

Well, I came to read this thinking Mrs. garbage found something interesting, and I was right! a one for effort!

ooooh delicious!! aren't you the schemer. my only problem, too many rhymes in the second stanza. but keep everything else especially the last stanza-it gave me shivers. 9

If I was not so depressed, this would have depressed me. I did smile slightly, although, it hurt my fece'.

There is a place beyond all of this pitter patter. That place is life on the planet Earth. Try it.

No. The path of the grey and the red are forbidden to pick, hence, why they are that color.

All life is temporary, and when it's pure shit out the gate it's kind of hard to tell when the payback is happening fuckface, because it never stopped, or started, it just always was. Is this your way of making a point? Because if it is? You are either projecting your own closeted insecurities about yout identity and penis size, or even worse, an uninformed self righteous security guard at walmart taking a wack at poetry. better stick with the shoplifters. I bet you thought you'd never have something in common with why farmers invented scarecrows huh? Moron.

"To you my arms I have spread. I am in need of your bread." keep this and erase the rest immediately. To turn gold into lead The vagina went red. I removed my fist then made a grocery list.

By the way, religion was created to keep people from thinking about what's really going on around them, and judging from the body of your work it has been successful. The stink of irony is so powerful that when I fainted a second ago I didn't fall because the smell, being so physically present, held me up.

"And seagulls cried as the boy started to wave." it had ahold of me until this line. Then I just laughed. You might consider losing it. Seriously.

tedious yet disturbing. i give you a 7

it neither inspires nor edifies. you get a 3

there's no shame to be blamed. pithy and sweet.

I'm a sentimental fool. A bitter sentimental fool.

maybe not "ever", but pointless, yes