Bill Z Bub
on STAR WARS by Garrett S Sexton
6 Apr 2003, 8:55 PM
buh?
It took me until the third stanza to realize this was about cats. I can be dense sometimes.
I like it.
I like quite a bit.
Good luck finding someone to fuck you out of being a dyke. 7.
:-D
I funckin' love it!
Bravo! Encore! Ten! Ten! Ten!
ZZINIA IS A CRAZY CAT LADY. read my new poems AMORE.
What is this? A metaphor for sucking cock after you've cleansed it with some pinesol?
Another factor in the growing spread of AIDS. Blue bib or not.
what do recommend for a nicew ruby red grapefruit?
he'll blow it quickly. and you'll still have holes in your boots. but then you can tell your grandkids about how you walked 8 miles uphill in a blizzard, with holes in your boots,...provided the rich kid doesn't steal your girlfriend, eh?
sometimes, it just sucks hard.
It's can't bondo the dent, chum.
Or not eat on lent.
Where have they all went?
To go get me a fucking clark kent bar.
I messed with black magic once. Not something you want to do lightly. It follows you. Just behind and to the left.
There it is. I guess I should dive in, go all the way, follow the dark muse to its bloody end. Maybe then, maybe then,
I'd be free. Meanwhile, I'll just send a curse to all mine enemies.
take . . . the pin . . . OUT!!!!
Awesome, and yes I want to punch him, shit in his bloody mouth, then light him on fire with a 9 volt battery and some naipalm. after that, i'll eat his breasts and penis with some hot mustard and a chilled chardonay. Hopefully the smell of burnt hair will still be lingering before the desert, charred eyeball on a stick with parfait.
i get it. dissonance. :}
but the rhyme feels forced, so that one line can't be the whole point of the poem, right? i mean, it's a poem, not an illustration. or have you been a naughty boy with settle? did he rub off on you?
isn't it orinic night rhymes w/ light??? wtf??? lol...asl?? rotfsd.
but, london to toronto by train???
not perfect, if wasting.
otherwise, damn this is good.
here i'll vote. and i'll do it again, once you assuage me.
Great title and equally written to maintain that fact.I would of gave it a nine, but I see you are still writing it so... later i guess i might.
You could add double the amount of the already doubled amount of simplistic adjectives that you used in this piece and still not manage to cut yourself. Perhaps instead you'll cut the cheese.
Dude if your brother used you as a fucktoy this isn't the place to tell the world. It's best to keep these things secret and to ourselves. The shame is yours and yours alone. Liked 3rd stanza best.
S'good. I like it. Most people come across as pretentious or psuedo-intellectual when they use words like "miasma," but you manage to make it work, and I have to respect that.