spring forward, fall back...i think. yes, that'll do just fine...

do you thumb at me sir?

you recieve a 5, but only because of priest holmes. i like the chiefs.

This is great. God i wish i could write like you, but as many will confirm i always end up producing a load of old rubbish. Just one small suggestion, perhaps you could change the last three words to "I wub wou"

Genius. Have a 9.

Utter shite. 1. You attempt to shock, but just leave me cold, safe in the knowledge I have discovered yet another dumb Yank.

i shall de-keg you with great flair i think by now your well aware that humble folk will laugh and stare since there are no organs there

Having written about loss so much from experience I can offer you my empathy, what you need to do is not try and write a poem but write how you feel down in your moments of profound sorrow and then think of the most personal moments you shared and tell the story past to present, then you will immortalize your uncle and that is the most fitting way I found coping in the dark hours. I wrote one called 'goodbye dad' please read it if you've not already, condolences by the way.

Deliciously evil and offensive 8

Interesting, and different..

first 6 lines read quickly, but from there it seems to slack off. understandable. you probably had a few good lines you wanted to work with and then had to force the rest out to finish. if not, i do that a lot, so i'll just go back to being alone with my stuffed animals

you seem to have a talent for exposing the dramatically depressing side of american history...about damn time.

wow, you should work for the army. you'd make a fine recruiter...

losing someone is always hard, so take my condolences with this basket of fruit. and remember, the body of a man once your uncle is gone, but he lives forever inside you and his loved ones...death is just a word invented to answer the question "where's <insert name>". i suggest keeping a picture of him always near to jog the fond memories...works for me.

nothing in me is deeper then my mind, not even my ass. congratulations on putting such a beautifully romantic touch on mindfucking...been a pleasure. really enjoyed 'you roam my cortex like a thesaurus'...guessing he was flipping through the pages in your head searching for something similar to relate to?

as being a somewhat outside obeserver for my time here, seems to me the young and rising children of this site are becoming an ever angering clic against the well placed and comfortably seated old timers from before my time...i suggest a duel. at noon...because as it were, that is as well cliche.

A good beginning, tidy up the presentation, for example; Handful. recind??? get rid of 'many'(it throws off the rythmn and is quite unnecessary) did linger? Why not lingered? water's Get rid of 'So' Can something sleep and weep?

I like the airport scene combined with porn star/whores thing to point out that its like a really good 1 night stand. Very good.-10- Just for using the words porn star, cortex, and whores, with other brain imagery and not boring me.

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she chopped it off? Just cause you had a quick handshandy? How awful. Can i have it for my collection of peni through the ages?