horus8
on some deleted poem
22 Jan 2003, 8:38 PM
So, i checked this out by the way..thanks.
Interesting. I like the pictures, there aren't enough around here. The sprite I don't like and the vinyl flames I don't understand. Very modern, very hip.
I am not a very good voter, but i will try.
shorty said.....you needs a sista then you wouldn't be writing shit like that to try to impress her....4
How can anyone deny your genius? You make me laugh so, and the high quality of your musings never ever slips, well actually soem of your little aids things weren't good enough. Probably because you didn't extrapolate(sp?).
What makes this an other? Still I kind of like it.
aelo, i am street performer. i play with cobra. since my accident, i stay on computer all day. my cobra, he hit my eye. aahhhhgggghhhhh. i play flute. i play the wrong song... i go toooooooo tooooddlllleeeee tooooo toooooddllllleeeee tooooo... and he HIT ME. aahhhhhggghhhhh.
HE HIT MY EYE WITH THE POISON TOOTH
running through my head...all the things you said.....trying to make sense......nooooooooooooo....7
ohhhhhhhh yeaaaaahhhhhh....9999999....i like your style alot...simple, sharp, accessible and to the point.
still unique but not as good as the other poemes you have posted....7
I like this....fighting the clouds for space... Overall, I like what you're trying to do, but at times it seemed choppy....work on the flow and then it would be in the 9/10 range.....for now 7.
the situation you describe is funny, but the sonnet is not working for me. What's darkest ever? Trees with leafs of leather?...odd, the image doesn't work.....6
Wow, teenage hormones.....just be asexual like me or go and get laid asap....geeez.... You want to take the crown from Christianity, really? What the hell do you even know about religion? It just sounded good so you threw it in, yes.
Wow, this is not as good as the others, but the others are quite good. You just need to say something is all. This one is going nowhere, the others seem to be building towards something. There's no emotion in any of them which I enjoy because it leaves things open for the audience, but this one has no style.
I lie your style a great deal, once again pictures galore. Thank you for showing and not telling. You write like a novelist.
bronze, thus concludes another fifteen minutes withy the dark one...so listen...i was just playing my guitar along to the crutchling, and it worked, so do you think i could perhaps use those lyrics, and we go 50/50 with the rights to the song, and i just record it acoustic with guitar sort of t-rex cuz i got this whole english music thing going on in my head right now and it sounded good...i could let you her the recording before airing it?
silver.
gold.
Strong poetry.