Fetylum
on I Can Write A Wrong, But I Can't Right A Poem by horus8
17 Dec 2002, 1:18 AM
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And I thought I was bad... Good use of really bad creativity, I give it..a TEN! Just because you made me laugh...
Be it not the curry to bring the end, but the cream cheese.
Good good ^___^
Ahh, mirth. What a nice poem.
Cheers! Why are people repeatedly voting above zero? If we're not careful, this might get lifted off the bottom! What a crime! This place is rightfully Blade's.
AESTHETIC THEORY
"Contrive a poem out of ears.
Tell it
so that its petals unchocolate
like a brain in a jar
Wax walnut, melting with thought.
Make it a poem almost
lewdly knowledgable
and make its knowledge
ooze, syrup from the punched trunk.
Make it snake up to the molecule whorey and put its mouth
atomic against the mouth of its core.
Pull on its stem
to expose its foetus. Make it
have children with sleek ginger jaws,
make the dogs moan when it passes,
let it out of its jar
make it lie with our corpse, our chaos.
Make it hungry, evil, enemy of Death.
Put it on paper. Read it.
Make surgery its sigh, and of such sting
the scorpions call it Jehovah & Who.
Make it now before you crapout.
Contrive it, sperm it, stroke it,
make it efficient, make it fit,
make it more poem than Poem can survive."
Stan Rice, Some Lamb 1975..
you've got to be shittin' me
Here is my attempt to track down your crappy poems and make a comment, which I have avoided at all costs in the past. Well, you have Intransit, who would give a pile of shit a 10 loving this and Athena, the plagiarist (or is it you) digging it, and Christof (the best poet on this site) well he was dazed and thinking of New Zealand, because it is shit. Just like all the other poem you write.
Holy shit this is strange. I need to read it a couple more times before I decide whether I like it or not. Good words, though. I'll give it an 8 for now, just because of the fifth line-'moon-haunted woods'-brilliant!
Wow, you've got a thing about these blue butterflies, haven't you?
Hope Doylum reads this
More shit!!!!!!!!!!!!!! But genius!!!!!!!!!!!!
LAMENT
"Cry not, my baby.
Cry.
I know a frog ate a white moth.
The frog did not cry.
That's why he's a frog.
The moth did not cry.
My baby, cry not. Cry.
There is much to do.
I will cry too.
I will cry for you.
Stan Rice, Some Lamb 1975..
But it is all of us that are missing the point. In 100 years this will be the pinnacle of art. haahahahhahaha
Whoever gave this a 10 was in need of either a GED or just completely drunk. Have not we established that this fictional character cannot write.!!!!! It is not worthy of more than a zero. I would give it less, but I am limited see, by nentwhistle. We need minus #s.
SP REYNOLDS
on Prose poem written in 1 minute and 27 seconds while listening to Slim Cessna croon by poetandknowit
17 Dec 2002, 12:35 AM
I appriciate you seeing the light, however Jesus came before
Hollywood, but if you would like to know my # or jeremy the greek's I suggest you come down to tinsle town and stand in line with the other star fucking freeks
And there was me thinking this was all about acid.
Like the poem though.
Hey, you should hear my group (the Psychedelic Butterflies) sometime. Oh, hang on, that means we actually have to record something.
The website threw me for a loop, I'm a little lost at the nature of the scoop. I found an http: that is currently poop. I have missed the metaphor forcing a frown, please dont tell me your passions are crowned
So how does that work? Where did they come from? And most importantly, why are they blue?