This is above all my learning. When are finals over so your friend will come back. I lost her e-mail!

Writing while drinking.

Funny and goofy at the same time.

Are you really from Nepal? Living there now?

I just love the hardcore English gangsta poems. It makes me want to explore further the mean streets of the criminal metropolis we call London.

why this type of line breaking for the haiku?

In this effort are you confusing punk song with say, hardcore song (you youngsters always seem to confuse the two),? Based on the words etched in blue I would vote the latter. If so, are you suggesting, or at least inferring by the chosen title, that all of these songs song alike or are attempting to affect the listener the same way?

This defeats any sort of thing I can say about it. I give it high marks for lack of slash upon entrance into water!

This is quite the ode to kitty. I shall read it to my love as he ponders away beside me, the ever fickle companion. Most excellent last line.

Excellent last stanza, although I am not a fan of the "yearning souls" bit. I realize it is important to the overall rhyme scheme, but the souls part good go. Call it "For a Good Time, Call".

I think you have thirty poems here, not one. Tackling it all at once is a bit like a survey course in contemporary history. And that is what the poem feels like. If you take individual concerns from the poem and give them personal anecdotes you might achieve what you are looking for: to be revolutionary. I think all these issues are important to rip into, but if you want to affect change maybe you should not overwhelm the reader.

Now Nicholas Jones, your task is to counter this with Rousseau, hence, "Sovereignty, being nothing less than the exercise of the general will, can never be alienated." One, two, three....go!

Is this like a short rap song. It has that Yo Yo hippity hop flow. Send one out to the peeps!!

I am not the fan 1) of what if poems and 2) questions in poems. The questions are what we ask ourselves to get to the point of some sort of answer or resolution, which is the poem. But that is only my opinion. Intransit gave you a big score and he is obviously the general audience.

After reading this twice, I was left with no real understanding of your poems meaning. There are too many metaphors and they seem forced. Ex... "In between the twinkle of my exploited eyes.." or: "In the soundproof clandestine tub of my soul..." I did like parts of your poem and would like to see more concrete and understandable metaphors and imagery. All I know about the "You" in your poem are a bunch of metaphors with no real meaning that I can perceive. Good luck:)

Was something changed here; why did this come back up. Hmmm. I looked but still seems like a hippity hop song, eh? and the space ? is still there. Hmmm.

Is this like the poetic version of the Tenacious D song "Tribute"?

nicely done.

aw, snap. all done, NJ.

Never seen concrete laid this nice before