Sometimes works. Mostly doesn't. Too many words. I can't explain

A lovely zest!nice!

Why do you people waste this space with boring arguments? Go to a chat room. This poem is wonderful! it unwraps phrases quick, snappy, like a fortune cookie! to the thought--I enjoyed it big time. More, More!

I did read all those books, they didn't get me far. :-)

Darling, feeling a bit cranky as usual? Well for your sake I'll let you in on a little secret. I know Jesus Christ and he is my saviour.

Oh and D.A. it's POEM not POEME. Thanks;-)

Why do you people waste this space with boring arguments? Go to a chat room. This poem is wonderful! it unwraps phrases quick, snappy, like a fortune cookie! to the thought--I enjoyed it big time. More, More!

i paint too, unfortunately...my advice to you would be no advice....i was dead serious about my editing adjustments for you on that other piece...as far as painting goes...if you think for a moment that a painter(any artist) is apprehensive about stretching another canvas on the back of a prior work...or to walk up to one of their paintings and white wash a section..you might want to go beat up your art teacher...check out 'basquiat', editing is part of the process...if not the whole process (think about that) the piece itself is just you editing out part of your own mind to paper in words or symbols or spoken form.....fear not...hit it with an axe dipped in paint?!

i'll agree to disagree with you, p&k. as a poem, i think it sags after 'but that's hours of drinking from now' (which, in my mind would make a great penultimate line to the 'sit back and wait for a happier hour' line he's got working for him now). the first 3 stanzas are t-i-g-h-t. i feel like the second half wanders off somewhere...perhaps to the men'sd room for a little relief? i did see what you were referring to, my dad is a superhero, so pardon me, i'm off to play shuffleboard.

What do you say p&k? Beautiful sobbing high-geared f**king and then we'll ly like silent deer tracks in the freshly fallen snow.

Therefore, you do not buy my "I'm a six year old theory?" Shall I change the about me? I am an ugly man, educated in the east, living in Misery, who is a hater of the ugly people. My dear, I am a strongly committed ugly man. What shall my other think if I am scurrying off?

maybe she'll--think of men waiting--to get in on it. personally, i prefer a higher man-to-woman ratio, but, what the hell.

Well I'm off. I've got talk to a group of gang-bangers about abstinence, safe sex, and getting an education. No joke. I'll be thinking about all your loving naked bodies the whole time. Well in your case p&k I guess it's your ugly naked body. Have fun kids.

glad you approved ole' boy....somethings are just to good to not be true, and that's when they "become". unfortunately that's about right at the time that i "succumb" irony is the tac that thumbed the lion.o

i don't think we have taken the time to truly appreciate the power behind the 'flush', let's take a moment please.thank-you. ???

upon reading this again, i feel the pull of the flush, sucking me into the vortex, the void. alas, my left nipple is dry...

Merci Beaucoup

hey, can i get in on this going-to-bed business? i'd not be missed...at least for a few hours, anyway.

Hell bring her along we'll make it a foursome.

because we can, and it creates an alluring paper trail...back story..