New Life Drug
on Daily Rutein by New Life Drug
30 Aug 2002, 7:29 PM
Exactly, I'm glad SOMEONE notices it sucks. By the way, that was like the first piece of poem/songs I ever wrote
give an example by sighting the line and the haiku by number please so that i might evaluate your claim closer.
abed and unum, excellent you win! what? who cares...you took the time. you must atleast give the title credit for being honest or not....care to dance? i have sherry!
i wont know for about a day or so, then they call you in for call backs if you made that cut..100/500.then there's a third callback 10/100 an den the final two, or they could just decide out the gate...who knows? it's better to just move on and assume nothing...that way it comes as a great suprise...the part was for a movie called "the account" i auditioned for the part of Kane (a wacked out bank robber) i've been nutty lately anyway, so i like held the guys face to my nipple(the guy they had auditioning with me, my partner) and i was like scary, but canivingly charismatic (i was extracting info from him, making sure he wasn't turning on me) with a deep touch of evil...then we did the next scene where we're robbing a bank...and instead of playing it all intimidating...i tried to seduce and humor my way through it, but with lots of wacky evil oozing out too. so..i guess we'll see..lol! fuck'em anyway, hope their set burns...their dialogue was shit, and cattle calls are the reason behind my urinating in public phobia, or compulsion rather. ha! fuck em....elitist prick....la victoria siempre! revolution!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
de nada. glad i could help.
I'm wanting to like this, but some of your language is throwing me off - specifically 'felicioius' and 'chaffinches'. Can you define these for me?
some deleted user
on some deleted poem
30 Aug 2002, 2:51 PM
The first one... a typo... chaffinch - a common European finch...
"falicitian" drop the one, As a felicitian she was writhing..... shortens the sentence..keeps the beat better, and maybe drop the "in", instantly makes it more appealing. lovely though...7/10.
I like the new stanza. Recasting my original vote.
Thanks for clarifying and editing. I really do like this. 8/10
This is great stuff - grrrrrreat! Thought-provoking commentary with a perfect opening companion piece of poetry. I hear you loud and clear. And I hate that fucker, too. 9/10
Bachus said thank you darling for the time in playnig with the boy who shot birds. your hair looks great today by the way.
I would like to know what pathetic hypocrite, gave this a 0. This poem seems to express himslef in it. I my self think this is a great poem. You did good work Tim.
open up your dictionary ass. obviously you can't fucking count..i'll wager the farm that you unfortunately are dead wrong...how does he know you say...cuz i hate this prick and i was the first to want to sink it, but nay.. the fool counted...i checked thrice...you have thick glasses?
what! you have sherry, and i am not invited? UNHAND me, sirrah!!!! and cease and desist your billets doux! without sgherry, they mean NOTHING!!!
well it did get a ten before a shadowed finger exposed the truth which is of course the truth cuz i of course am i liar, hence the foolish liars love letter. are you good at shell tricks too. i bet you are....Malthusian
Z - took your initial suggestions, thanks again!