um...okay, lol, that was a interesting comment! LoL. but what do you really think about that poem? I'm like new at this whole poem thing, and stribing to be a little better, lol! Well write me back if you have a chance!! <3 kaite

keybored is very good.

Poor love!6

It's a tad too depressing for my tastes, but you manage to convey the sense of loneliness without resorting to the any of the cliched stereotypes like 'darkness', etc, and so for that I gives you a 7. I look forward to more.

I think that your writing this for a biology assignment was fantastic. A classic.

I love your poem!!! goodluck =) <3 katie

holy crap, it actually says "fizz of fear". God's Wife, I thought you were mocking it or something, but "fizz of fear"? what the foosh?

Stop "lol"-ing. Personally, I think it's terrible. Angsty, dull, uselessly repetitive, no real meaning and filled with really annoying typos.

I love this one. I can't really say much more (it's early and i'm sleep-fuzzy), just...wow.

This is just lovely. I don't know what's in that Blue Ridge Air but I'd like some

ironically, this appeared randomly immediately following 'nentwined wins'.

As for criticism, shouldn't it be "broken starfish cries"? You only have one, don't you? Or perhaps "broken starfish leaks".

THIS IS DRIBBLE!!!

you too huh. bummer.i actually liked it though. so, i give you permission to beat me now to.. fist me. baby!, what happened to whitejones? was it. the bugger, he vanished heh. bummer.try the soup yet? it's good stuff. you'll like much. moving on. later 7/10!

you suck. sorry. my femur's bigger than yours, and my plaster of paris is from paris. nah....(tongue out lol!) vibrate.dagger.iree.hemp. 4

That's very kind Mrs God. I've had odd pieces published here and there in small mags in Britain, but certainly not in book form. No one wnats my stuff enough! But I'm glad you do. Thank you.

keybored ?- otherwise good-8/10

you're fired.cuz i love you.s

I like this though I'm not convinced by the ending. Good rhythmic beat and central image.

good