You see I like this because of the way it flows and just the words yuo have used and the order you have put them in.I don't think it matters that I only think I know what it's about.

thanks

Why? so the illiterate can stare at it and pick their asses and go...gee, "but it's so long and complicated". no thanks. i would much rather read the spittle of under sexed well read house wifes with divinity complexes...going like...wow! here child is your poetry lesson for the day...just for you...from a cultured bossom, lol!. the bottom line is..some are born to write, and others born to pretend..like dark angel for example, now he's one of these talented types with a hundred ways of expressing the creative medium, if not thousands, but you. what? always...feminine power pumping estrogen reeking girl to woman romps that stink of infatuating with what you can never be, 'as powerfull as daddy' bicep flex in the summer sun. now dark angel, he's talented and diverse, and goes to hip trendy hipper stiller trendier clubs like coven 13, and stigmata w/the likes of kino...and hallucinets...bravo god's wife, and you too da, you both fail, and i'll see you on judgement day when the great hoof in the sky decides it's time your beaks were squared....loose minded critics are a dime a dozen whether talking about father's balls and the need for balls of their own, or gay poo body rubbing, or mother, or gods, or whatever, but me and mine are onto the collaging of the past and the future of writing through more symbolically reranged sources, sorry you didn't get tapped for the 'think tank of tesla grovelers" like me.maybe next time. in a world that respects the real power of big cock propaganda, and doesn't dwell on trite things like, poo and daddy and mommies. you might get your big break!...you all make me eat boogers and fart on the dog. i hate you. all of you.....bastards...interlopers.

See I like this one too.A touch of the Jim Steinman if I'm not mistaken.Like the epilogue thought of inanimate objects and the stories they could tell.

Another daddies cock poem, but wow this time it's a duh duh duh,dah.ufo, with shortwave radio powers. look out....anagram is a diaphram doo da doo da...fail.fail.fail.

1 million thank yous. Why is it your poems have never popped up when I choose random? Hmmmm. I wonder. I will make it a point to view them. Again thank you for commenting, but mostly thank you for giving me insight. I live for those moments when someone guides me towards being a little more bearable.

Leave Anagram alone. He's my new friend, and he's Scottish and will hammer you into the ground with his big Scottish fists!

Great last line on previous comment.What I think GW means is, there is a little group of Mafiosa who swarm this site making stinging comments on poetry that doesn't meet their belief of what good poetry is.To meet this criteria you must write very difficult poems for mere mortals to understand you must also throw in the odd smattering of unsavoury words and God forbid never let anything rhyme. Don't get me wrong the group she refers to do often write very good poetry (she included)but then they witter on about it in psuedo Keats, Shelley & Byron claptrap that they fail to see that all poetry appeals to somebody (even if only the writer)and the purpose of posting here is just to see if anyone else might enjoy it. I ask you, why does a poem have to paint a whole picture what is wrong with portraying only the sentiment behind something and leaving the rest to the readers imagination. GW frequently advises newcomers to beware the harsh crircism coming their way but I suspect this is because most of her work has been received by them rather well and she wants to build a fearsome reputation for the gang she is so desperate to join.I don't consider myself to be so good or clever to severely critcise anyones poetry,if I like it I give it a good mark and congratulatory comment,if I don't I move on to another.However errors in comments are another thing so I take it when she says 'element' she means 'eliminate'. However as she says don't take any of it seriously because if the critics were any good we'd be paying for their work and not here getting to slate it for free.Keep writing what you feel like and I for one will keep reading.

Anagara: you've made alot of good points. I will take them into consideration. You are wrong about me wanting to become part of their group. I'm not here for that. I want to get a feel for how my poetry impacts people and how i can improve it.That is all. I wish someone would critize my poetry in an effective way, maybe you? Perhaps you're right not to critize, and maybe I should follow in kind. I assumed folk's posted their work here because they wish to improve. But maybe you're right and they just want to share.

Thanks for taking my words in the spirit they were intended (albeit with a slight sprinkling sarcasm)(my words that is, not your taking of them).I don't consider myself worthy of criticising any poem negatively because I've written some things which I thought were good yet others disagreed I have also written stuff that has received universal acclaim but I have also written verse that I know is crap. I think as said that as long as somebody likes it then it is justified. I have read all your poems but will do so again and make a point of saying what I think about those I like which I imagine will be most of them. This one I think is excellent, it is beautifully written and struck a chord with me probably because I have two kids aged 17 & 4 not pretty robed young ladies though - grubby boys trying to master their skills with their hammers.

#1 - you have no idea to the criticism i have been through in my life. #2 - people are going to jump on me like wounded prey ... like you have? #3 - take my name as how i feel about anybody's criticism! BTW - why would god choose you as her wife, anyway?

Yep, you're right - this isn't a poem ... it was a Christmas card that I designed and wrote while in High School.

Ok so it's an it. All you refer to is you, you ,you ,you, at nauseum. I used the personal pronoun he so what? Your poem is still way below par, to say the least.

I thought so. It's very beautiful, and anyone with your ability to preceive life'sreality can make an impact as a poet.

Look I tried to be gentle, but there is really no nice way to say your a terrible poet. p.s. I chose God, HE didn't choose me.I am the Goddess not Him.

You're welcome. Look all i mean is you should expect more from your poems. I bet if you tried just a little bit harder to be more specific you could come up with some better examples for the experiences you're trying to represent

Yeah OK. You have your own style that I like.

Anagram : sorry i spelled your name wrong i'm no good at this typing thing. Just a post script; I have not been accepted by the Mafiosos. To the contrary they refuse to leave any comments or votes. The few i have received have been from more the 'working class' and that's who I identi with, again if you would please comment on my stuff good, bad or indifferent.

Why?

Aaah! Good poem. Last 2 lines could be a poem onto themselves.6