Christof
on some deleted poem
22 Aug 2002, 7:57 AM
The rhythms of this are very uncertain. 'Warry' = 'weary'? And coworkers just doesn't work, I'm afraid.
I was hloping this would be about Lord of the Rings. I'm disappointed.
not as good as
Sexxodus, but fun nonetheless.
why thank you.
i can never forgive you for subjecting the world to this crap.
something you should be deprived of?
o what a torture to read 'artistically' formatted flatfiles posing as poetry....
I also wonder if this is a bit ragged around the edges, but the concrete section in the middle is beuatifully handled.
Razorgrin, was your comment just a weird coincidence, or did you, too, see a TV programme about women changing into men and taking hormones so that their clitorises grew into monstrous quasi-penises? One of them said, in a horrible androgynous voice, "It's not quite a clit, it's not quite a dick. I call it my clitdick."
This is sweetly regretful. Perhaps 'blind' should be 'deaf' just to reinforce the unity of your central image? But it doesn't really matter. Your final two lines are the best because of their colloquialism.
I really love this one. Best undead ever. Very clever.
Glad my rants are appreciated.Genitals with genders are scary. "Oh my gawd, my dick has a clit!"
You are the mistress of the humorous haiku.
Stark and bleak and simple - very pwerful indeed. Perhaps lose the first two lines? Because lines 3-4 have a human power your more abstract first two lines lack.
this is a really good piece. You write well. I don't like you but you write damn well.
this is a really good piece. You write well. I don't like you but you write damn well. I recognized the sexton-ness. nice.
Hey, you've got me to thank for getting you on the 15 best poems list!