Christof
on would i be considered crazy by silvertongueddevil
22 Aug 2002, 1:55 AM
Definitely crazy but it makes a good poem. Some of the language in the econd stanza is a bit stilted ('re-engage my interest in food' especially) but the idea is so compelling that it wins out.
i hope a clan of hobgoblins sets up shop in your arse!...you hobbit loving soccer junkies!
Actually quite funny
some guys have all the luck....we can only hope he's not a diabetic, or sickle cell anemic...8/10
I love the punning of 'fishermen' 'casting tales' - subtle. And the ending is so quietly regretful. Wonderful.
A little long on words and short on spirit
Definitely crazy but it makes a good poem. Some of the language in the second stanza is a bit stilted ('re-engage my interest in food' especially) but the idea is so compelling that it wins out.
I like this, but cherriesdon't grow on a vine. I know it sounds pedantic but in a form as compressed as haiku you have to make the image really count.
This is a very traditional poem on a very traditional subject. That said, the rhyming is really good - totally unforced, especially in the stanza discussing the marble and the rose - and the metre is flawlessy adhered to. I'm not so sure about the syntactical inversion ''Tis fair to in a brothel hide' though.It's 1798 all over again....
how can anyone not like swine or swill?
hawaiian pig roasts rock! especially when they shave it, then stick it to drain.. SQUEAL! that's what children need more of, SQUELCHING! pig killingS, AND lord of the fly lullabies..l
OK, horus8/bachus/baba yaga, you win, I can't be bothered with this split identity thing any more, you just keep on ranting in your clever/remedial way and I'll steer round it and maybe we'll both be happy. And Dark Angel - would you prefer that I hate everything equally? Surely one of the points of criticism is that you discuss a single poem on its merits rather than swaggering in with a predetermined persona dispensing shards of ill-formed and meretricious nonsense? And I said Tom Waits because that's exactly what it sounds like. Did you take exception to that comment because you don't know what I'm talking about?
perplexing...maybe? why what?, and not........<the big if> 7/10.
lets ray liotta your brain for hannibal! then feed it to your tolkien spewing lips! ahhhhhh. may sauron syrup your femurs!??
has memorybabe's honor been restored! how benign..i guess i win the welcome back cotter pez dispenser..i will treasure it forever...good evening sir, i'm off to hunt down psuedo dark brown angels....while my nemises is slumbering....yes..when the cat's away the mice shall play...barry manilow jingles, and wine the goat cheese..baa..bah...silence ye goats! the trolls are afoot'. excuse me sir...i'm on a mission! my goats are udderly contemptuous..do forgive..ta
Bleeding hell, this has nothing to do with Memorybabe - I just thought that, while you might not like her poem very much, there was no need to be so brutal. Just who exactly do you think you are? But now I find out you think you're at least three people, and frankly I can't be arsed to deal with your semi-literate Roseanne Barr-like affectations.
but since we're here are you implying that my lyrics suggest a tom waitish sound...cuz i still do believe you have yet to even 'hear' the 'sound' que no? or have you heard it?. doubt that...so what your saying is that "it"(my song about a childs crush on ann sexton) 'sounds' like tom w. but without actually ever hearing it ..yet...fascinating?, and how long have you been capable of this mind expanding anomally...you sir are definitely a cad, and an evil telepathic midget cloner....i assure you if you heard the song waits would be the fifth name that mouth popped not the first...the first would probably be...more jeff buckly, or leonard cohen, but who's to say really..i never took the waits thing as an insult anyway...i just despise assumersa
ah.... i see, see that wasn't so hard to explain...i can dig that...very well. carry on with your kerouacian (american) haikus...<on the road> again..../neal and sal/getting high/on wine spotioti/......i think i did one too.splendid...caio..l
Definitely crazy but it makes a good poem. Some of the language in the second stanza is a bit stilted ('re-engage my interest in food' especially) but the idea is so compelling that it wins out.
Definitely crazy but it makes a good poem. Some of the language in the second stanza is a bit stilted ('re-engage my interest in food' especially) but the idea is so compelling that it wins out.
This is erotic as hell. You're a sly one, Venus. I like it.