Re: Beneath the Willow Tree by cyan9	zodiac 217.144.7.195	15-Nov-05/9:50 AM
A very good movie summary. I'm guessing Phenomenon?
regarding some deleted poem...	zodiac 217.144.7.195	15-Nov-05/9:52 AM
This first stanza is the best of what you've posted here.
Re: Math Poem 4 by Dovina	ALChemy 24.74.101.159	14-Nov-05/7:59 PM
Sounds like a good place to be, Minus-Neverland. I wonder what the tree looks like; The one with the square root that is.
Re: The Gate of Heaven by TLRufener	Dovina 69.175.32.104	14-Nov-05/5:13 PM
You have expressed the Christian view of heaven where the goal is to get there. May I ask why so much more of the Bible is dedicated to glorifying God than to being glorified in heaven.
Re: Math Poem 4 by Dovina	zodiac 217.144.7.195	15-Nov-05/12:57 AM
Take off that silly cape and stop flapping around Alpha Beta. You're not in Narnia. It's getting embarrassing to be seen with you in public.
regarding some deleted poem...	zodiac 217.144.7.195	15-Nov-05/9:37 AM
Cute. Is vignette the right word? I mean that honestly; I don't know or have the computing power to check. I would have said epigram.
Re: After Fighting (More Blood Edit) by zodiac	ALChemy 24.74.101.159	15-Nov-05/12:52 PM
"What is thy name?"... "but Israel shall be thy name. And he called his name Israel."
regarding some deleted poem...	zodiac 217.144.7.195	15-Nov-05/9:49 AM
Good rhyme, good rhythm, good lyricism. Nice that you've gotten those images out of the way. Now you have no excuse for using them again.
Re: Seasonal Love by Bhaskaryya	Dovina 69.175.32.104	14-Nov-05/5:22 PM
Nice, to put on his pillow at each season's beginning.
Re: Close To The Beginning by RawPunkGirl	Dovina 69.175.32.104	14-Nov-05/5:34 PM
So few poems end well. Life should end well, why not poems. Are all poets working against what should be?
Re: Now and Memory by elderking	Dovina 69.175.32.104	14-Nov-05/5:51 PM
Good. I'd shorten the first verse to give it more power: cast upon the canvas, sketched within my past, she waits for me. Or somesuch.
regarding some deleted poem...	Tintagiles 142.166.239.234	14-Nov-05/10:22 PM
I rarely write about real things, and this is proof of it, though it started as a fair description of a trip I was recently on. I freely admit that while being driven northwards, I was reading Pound's Cantos. (And believe it or not, Zodiac, I much preferred the lyrical ones to the others.)
Re: Two Mirrors by Dovina	zodiac 217.144.7.195	15-Nov-05/2:14 AM
I just realized: Two mirrors exactly facing each other don't reflect anything.
regarding some deleted poem...	ALChemy 24.74.101.159	15-Nov-05/6:51 AM
I agree.
regarding some deleted poem...	ALChemy 24.74.101.159	15-Nov-05/6:53 AM
You were so proud of this you put your name on it twice.
regarding some deleted poem...	Dovina 69.175.32.104	15-Nov-05/11:01 AM
How many birds settle on a human's tree? Are they dumb?
regarding some deleted poem...	Dovina 69.175.32.104	15-Nov-05/11:06 AM
Good flow and rhythm. "sins" seems inacurate. "The future calls" seems a bad shift.
regarding some deleted poem...	Dovina 69.175.32.104	15-Nov-05/11:09 AM
Whimsical and carrying less content than poetic effort.
Re: After Fighting (More Blood Edit) by zodiac	Dovina 69.175.32.104	15-Nov-05/11:16 AM
I believe now that you really love me. The way you would a fluffy little dog. It's touching, really. And this morning my hair looks that way. I'll release the knee from your neck now, knowing you'll not relent.
Re: not to settle for less than almost obliteration by ay deee	richa 81.178.152.186	15-Nov-05/2:28 PM
If you give the instance you should not have to state the theme, it should be obvious. Pushing too hard is not the best word choice to describe letting a fire get out of control. Put 'it' back together; the only 'it' in this poem is the fire. Strong glue to fix something that is burnt is unapt. I like the rest of it though. It has a decent spine.