Re: What? by DaRkMoOnLuVeR	whispern_smoke_wisp 205.188.116.135	5-Mar-05/9:48 AM
i agree with i_am_the_popsicle
Re: Do I Know U? by DaRkMoOnLuVeR	whispern_smoke_wisp 205.188.116.135	5-Mar-05/9:49 AM
i agree with crooked_smile
Re: Fastso by Dovina	that_funny_girl 205.188.116.135	5-Mar-05/9:32 AM
i like this - makes you think - 9
Re: You Fell Asleep First by jessicazee	that_funny_girl 205.188.116.135	5-Mar-05/9:33 AM
i agree with crooked_smile - 10 -
Re: Nothing And Everything by DaRkMoOnLuVeR	that_funny_girl 205.188.116.135	5-Mar-05/9:43 AM
i agree with i_am_the_popsicle - 6 -
regarding some deleted poem...	whispern_smoke_wisp 205.188.116.135	5-Mar-05/9:54 AM
i agree with i_am_the_popsicle
Re: His Light by DevilBuni	that_funny_girl 205.188.116.135	5-Mar-05/9:35 AM
i agree basically with crooked_smile - but like it a little bit less - 4 -
Re: Do I Know U? by DaRkMoOnLuVeR	crooked_smile 205.188.116.135	5-Mar-05/8:36 AM
im not a very big fan of rhyming, and this does sound rather forced to me - 5-
Re: a note to the politically inactive fundamentalist christians by i_am_the_popsicle	edpeterson 68.79.19.251	5-Mar-05/8:36 AM
Well, if nothing else, at least this puddle of poorly executed drivel has sparked another masterpiece from -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. For providing the impetus for his his comment, I applaud you, and, really, I should vote 10 on this asinine ramble based on his comment alone. But I cannot, in good conscience, do so.
Re: Fastso by Dovina	edpeterson 68.79.19.251	5-Mar-05/8:42 AM
Well, it may have gone on a bit, but the first stanza made me guffaw with a recklessness I had not known since middle school. I think I will give you a real vote on this one, as it is a nice change-up from that programming hunger bullshit. You have earned it with what I percieve to be genuine repentance. Forgiveness is yours my child.
Re: You Fell Asleep First by jessicazee	crooked_smile 205.188.116.135	5-Mar-05/8:47 AM
ooh i love this im not sure if you were trying to convey an "inner" meaning, or if you were just giving an illustrative piece but either way i think its excellent - 10 -
Re: Losing To Anatomy by Blindpoetry	crooked_smile 205.188.116.135	5-Mar-05/8:32 AM
very interesting, i like the images and the melody of it, but im not quite sure im understanding the full meaning
Re: Simple by wilco	RION12 64.136.26.226	5-Mar-05/10:09 AM
Cool poem.
Re: Fastso by Dovina	edpeterson 68.79.19.251	5-Mar-05/8:44 AM
ahhh.. those were the good old days when I could lie back on the sofa of an afternoon and slag away, unimpeded by the demanding task of critiquing poemes.
Re: His Light by DevilBuni	crooked_smile 205.188.116.135	5-Mar-05/8:49 AM
ah, id say this is just a tab bit cliched, and the rhyming is stale and seems forced, you also spelled souless wrong i believe...the idea you are trying to convey are nice but I think you need to liven it up a bit......- 5 -
Re: Nothing And Everything by DaRkMoOnLuVeR	i_am_the_popsicle 205.188.116.135	5-Mar-05/9:08 AM
interesting and i like some of the word choice especially at the end, however it often at times seems just a bit forced and im not quite sure i get the purpose of this poem - 6 -
Re: What? by DaRkMoOnLuVeR	i_am_the_popsicle 205.188.116.135	5-Mar-05/9:10 AM
uch, no offence but this is terribly terribly cliched, and i dont feel it is all that well written - 4 -
regarding some deleted poem...	i_am_the_popsicle 205.188.116.135	5-Mar-05/9:15 AM
- i am not a very big fan - reminds the rhyming seems quite forced and this reminds me of something a 12 year old might write - 5 -
regarding some deleted poem...	i_am_the_popsicle 205.188.116.135	5-Mar-05/9:21 AM
its okay - i like the theme and some of the lines in the beginning are nice - but some are also akward - 7 -
Re: The drug prayer by Nitroxide	dancin_n_da_moonlite 205.188.116.135	5-Mar-05/11:25 AM
i like it but it is just a bit long