| Re: Insanity by Lifeboatman |
Dovina 12.72.10.24 |
14-Feb-05/3:21 PM |
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| Re: Poem Written on a Ketchup Stained Paper Plate by woodstock20000 |
Dovina 12.72.10.24 |
14-Feb-05/3:23 PM |
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Get a title and go with it - not bad.
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| Re: Valentine's Day is Two Days Away and I Don't Feel Loved by MacFrantic |
Dovina 12.72.10.24 |
14-Feb-05/3:17 PM |
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"Her charming come-hithers" is good. The rest so-so.
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| Re: Piercings by PsydewaysTears |
Dovina 12.72.10.24 |
14-Feb-05/3:34 PM |
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Forced rhymes: sneese-please, three-be
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| regarding some deleted poem... |
Dovina 12.72.10.24 |
14-Feb-05/3:43 PM |
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An often-told tale of aging, but nicely told.
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| Re: Children in the Storm by thepinkbunnyofdoom |
Dovina 12.72.10.24 |
14-Feb-05/3:31 PM |
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Second to last verse is very nice.
window sill
Stop scaring me
wherever
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| Re: a study in blossoms and beauty by oneglove |
Dovina 12.72.10.24 |
14-Feb-05/3:46 PM |
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I'm glad I'm not your woman. I'd hate to be gushed over like this.
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Dovina 12.72.10.24 |
14-Feb-05/3:39 PM |
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I see the nails-wounds thing, but how is her surface in your limbs is like Christ on electrodes?
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| Re: a study in blossoms and beauty by oneglove |
wilco 24.165.207.93 |
14-Feb-05/7:44 PM |
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Way overwritten. You could say this in half the words and make it much better. It is overly..um...mushy, but theres some to salvage here. Just cut it in half.
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| regarding some deleted poem... |
wilco 24.165.207.93 |
14-Feb-05/7:46 PM |
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1) They're never as good as you think they will be.
2) You already know that.
3) Usually I cringe every time I read one of yours knowing that it's going to be the same old thing. For some reason, I actually kind of like this one. Don't ask me why, but I do.
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| regarding some deleted poem... |
wilco 24.165.207.93 |
14-Feb-05/7:48 PM |
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Ok, I can dig this. I seem to remember on one of mine not so long ago, you saying that you're the person you always wanted to be...maybe not the exact words. Anyway, simply put and not bad.
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| regarding some deleted poem... |
wilco 24.165.207.93 |
14-Feb-05/7:50 PM |
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Well, you use good imagery, even if it doesnt always make perfect sense.
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| Re: Piercings by PsydewaysTears |
wilco 24.165.207.93 |
14-Feb-05/7:51 PM |
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Too much obviously forced rhyme.
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| regarding some deleted poem... |
horus8 24.130.62.63 |
14-Feb-05/1:02 PM |
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| Re: Denied by Freethinker1602 |
horus8 24.130.62.63 |
14-Feb-05/1:04 PM |
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I would Ke-Ke, but I don't date thee ethnic.
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| Re: a study in blossoms and beauty by oneglove |
oneglove 205.133.194.49 |
14-Feb-05/6:07 PM |
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i know you all tire of reading overly mushy poems but its valentines day so i thought if there was any day for this poem it was today.
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| Re: Never... by jessicazee |
wilco 24.165.207.93 |
14-Feb-05/7:35 PM |
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Nice little list of things to never do. I wrote a similar one a while back called "32 Truths and 1 Lie". Some good advice here, but what if you HAVE to stay in one place longer than one hour? Sorry, just giving a hard time. Not too bad.
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| Re: Lent Begins by jessicazee |
wilco 24.165.207.93 |
14-Feb-05/7:38 PM |
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"Her cough sounds like mornings": great.
Good observations here. I actually enjoyed it.
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| Re: Love Poem in HTML by Plaidypus |
wilco 24.165.207.93 |
14-Feb-05/7:40 PM |
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I'm sorry, but this is just irritating to try to read. I can appreciate you're trying to be original here, but this sort of thing just makes it bad. Just stick to the basics and write the poem.
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| Re: Pillow Talk by horus8 |
wilco 24.165.207.93 |
14-Feb-05/7:41 PM |
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Yours are always interesting. I'll give you that.
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