Re: AIDS in a Doug by horus8	wFraser Allonby Q.C.w 195.157.153.253	17-Sep-04/6:16 AM
There once was an AIDS-tainted chimp Who worked in the slums as a pimp. He acquired the virus By feeling desirous About an old man with a limp.
Re: Me by berdabear	NoSage 63.190.64.245	17-Sep-04/8:00 AM
You start off on the wrong foot by saying attatchment is all it can be, is there no room for growth? Still, I like it. Also, I imagine all of you IS everything to the right one.
Re: Addicted by berdabear	NoSage 63.190.64.245	17-Sep-04/8:11 AM
Mmmmm Mmmmm Mmmmm
regarding some deleted poem...	NoSage 63.190.64.245	17-Sep-04/8:22 AM
So much emotion packed into such a small poem.
Re: AIDS in a Doug by horus8	dougsoderstrom 207.80.112.1	17-Sep-04/10:05 AM
An absolutely wonderful poem! I think the rhymes are great. And the part about Doug....... really cool! But I didn't understand "the pee part." Did that part refer to the fact that one who is not finely attuned to democracy really is pee? And, Horus, do you really have a beard? Tell me the truth, Horus, do you? And just a little reminder here....... Aids is not fun! Love, Doug P.S. Keep up the good work you're doing.......... your fan, Doug
regarding some deleted poem...	berdabear 198.81.26.47	17-Sep-04/10:15 AM
All I can say is Wow! Especially the second verse I can so relate in my own way. A perfect 10 for being real.
regarding some deleted poem...	redneck_woman3322 216.129.234.96	17-Sep-04/1:41 PM
This is an excellent poem!!! There is also a lot of emotion in this poem as well....I loved the last line..." I'll send you to your grave with the curse of my silver thorn"....great job!
Re: Stirrings by dougsoderstrom	redneck_woman3322 216.129.234.96	17-Sep-04/2:16 PM
This poem is great...I am always "soul searching"...well written I think....
regarding some deleted poem...	horus8 24.130.62.63	17-Sep-04/3:21 PM
An abominable snow yam
regarding some deleted poem...	sliver 63.189.17.123	17-Sep-04/4:04 PM
I feel the same way about so many people, but I find it's the little things I can do which seem to make the most difference. This poem strikes chords in my heart. It's not the best I've read here, but it has a special meaning for me. Thank You.
regarding some deleted poem...	sliver 63.189.17.123	17-Sep-04/4:13 PM
Going thru' the graveyard in Stole Kansas?
regarding some deleted poem...	sliver 63.189.17.123	17-Sep-04/4:16 PM
FANTASTIC, I just tried my first acrostic the other day, check it out. Loved this.
regarding some deleted poem...	sliver 63.189.17.123	17-Sep-04/4:19 PM
Something about the snow and blue salt? Repititions from the previous one of yours I read. I liked it better.No particular reason, just seemed to flow better in my head.
regarding some deleted poem...	sliver 63.189.17.123	17-Sep-04/4:22 PM
Did she win?, Or saving herself for another day?
regarding some deleted poem...	sliver 63.189.17.123	17-Sep-04/4:33 PM
Try to rework it, I like the content well enough, but it sounds broken when I read it.
Re: Into My World by sliver	some deleted user 4.131.20.149	17-Sep-04/5:31 PM
Lovely. I don't know why the first comment(ator?)(is that the word?) thought it was too sentimental. No no no. It's not syrupy, it's romantic, and there is a different. Of course, one must be careful with teh romantic, because the line between it and sickly sweet is thin. But it does exist. Fine hidden message. Fine, simple, genuine. I don't love the acrostic format, my acrostic poem 'Late, December', posted earlier today, was a class assignment. But I hadn't been writing in awhile, and it was a good catalyst in its ridgidity. Most poems with clever, hidden messages make me cringe. This one didn't, and that's great. My only suggestions: you use pale twice in the first stanza. Perhaps there's another synonym that would expel needless repetition. Also, last two lines are great but "since you've come into my world" possibly borders on cliche. It's the only thing. I like the idea, but perhaps you can give it more specific phrasing, like "since you walked through my door" or something. Saying the same, but in more exact imagistic language. In any case, 9/10. Oh, and sorry this is so long.
Re: the thrill to kill by AM I EVIL?	AM I EVIL? 24.71.61.94	17-Sep-04/5:45 PM
ya its kinda violent but.........i was real pissed off when i wrote it so what can i say?
Re: AIDS in a Doug by horus8	klosterfobik 172.145.75.64	17-Sep-04/5:59 PM
An absolute turd!
Re: AIDS in a Doug by horus8	some deleted user 172.145.75.64	17-Sep-04/6:25 PM
Thoughtless shit laid on a bed of stank ass.
Re: The Mirror by berdabear	berdabear 198.81.26.47	17-Sep-04/6:25 PM
Thanks for the vote of confidence, I only have fleeting moments of self hatred. Maybe its hormones maybe to much whisky sometimes. I find that writing about it helps to relieve the stress and I usualy feel much better. Kinda like lancing the wound to let the poison spill out so that it heals faster.