regarding some deleted poem...	sliver 63.190.72.100	5-Sep-04/4:51 PM
Sounds like a keeper Dan.
regarding some deleted poem...	sliver 63.190.72.100	5-Sep-04/4:53 PM
Maybe you should find a different motel?
Re: Edges by Blue Magpie	sliver 63.190.72.100	5-Sep-04/4:57 PM
I have enjoyed this immensly, and you danced around many of the edges I walk in life. Well written, well thought out. Definite-10-
Re: A Poem by BigB	sliver 63.190.72.100	5-Sep-04/5:01 PM
I would have to agree w/ Dovina, The crappy title makes me expect a crappy poem, You have a good image here, but you need to knead it a little more.
Re: The Little Merman by avery	sliver 63.190.72.100	5-Sep-04/5:08 PM
Yea, umm, no. kinda lost it somewhere around the third stanza, or was it the first?
Re: Isadora by avery	sliver 63.190.72.100	5-Sep-04/5:10 PM
What is wang zhenghui?
regarding some deleted poem...	sliver 63.190.72.100	5-Sep-04/5:12 PM
Some men can. Be careful who you drink with!!!
Re: Awakened Dream by Faulk	horus8 24.130.62.63	5-Sep-04/8:06 PM
Fishy.
regarding some deleted poem...	Blue Magpie 212.205.251.70	5-Sep-04/9:42 PM
I quite liked this, nice scheme, nice thoughts. S2L4 would become a perfect rhyme if you wrote it as "Leaving behind only empty regret" you don't need to say it is your regret that follows naturally enough.
regarding some deleted poem...	Blue Magpie 212.205.251.70	5-Sep-04/9:44 PM
I think a little rhythm and rhyme here would have been most appropraite and would have enhanced the humour.
regarding some deleted poem...	Blue Magpie 212.205.251.70	5-Sep-04/9:52 PM
There is a good start here but it is rough, the rhythm falters and crashes often. You are a fan of Blake's Tyger Tyger I suspect, but perhaps I am wrong. Anyway this needs editorial work. As an example try inverting the order of lines 1 and 2
Re: A Poem by BigB	Blue Magpie 212.205.251.70	5-Sep-04/9:54 PM
I also think a better title, or more clarification in the poem would be in order.
Re: Stand Up For Yourself !!! by Brandy_n_Cali	Blue Magpie 212.205.251.70	5-Sep-04/9:58 PM
Further more you have not really said anything new, which means you have to say it in a memorable way to make your effort worth while, communication and especially poetry is not just ideas in words, but ideas/feelings in words that are well used, shaped and polished like a gem until they shine.
regarding some deleted poem...	Leah11 203.54.48.81	5-Sep-04/10:10 PM
how wonderful. thank you
Re: The Plague of Being by D. $ Fontera	Leah11 203.54.48.81	5-Sep-04/10:13 PM
It seems hand in hand we fall through our hopes and fears. This gave me shivers
regarding some deleted poem...	darylchew 202.156.2.130	5-Sep-04/10:32 PM
i think you're good. does someone hate you a lot or what. i noticed a lot of anonymous "0s". and a lot of your poems are on the worst page. o.O
regarding some deleted poem...	New Life Drug 69.106.226.24	6-Sep-04/12:31 AM
she should have payed after putting you through that torture. wooo.
Re: Edges by Blue Magpie	New Life Drug 69.106.226.24	6-Sep-04/12:32 AM
yea, poets really do find beauty in the smallest things
Re: A Poem by BigB	New Life Drug 69.106.226.24	6-Sep-04/12:36 AM
potential is the word.
Re: Awakened Dream by Faulk	New Life Drug 69.106.226.24	6-Sep-04/12:42 AM
ummmmm