| Re: True Friendship; No boundaries with You and Me by meghan |
darylchew 202.156.2.130 |
5-Sep-04/6:57 AM |
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is bestest even a word. spelling mistakes.
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| Re: Car Crashes by poemwanker |
darylchew 202.156.2.130 |
5-Sep-04/8:28 AM |
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vulgarities. are not tolerated.
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| Re: The Awakening by Kitch |
darylchew 202.156.2.130 |
5-Sep-04/8:40 AM |
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| Re: By the way... by sk8boardandpoems |
darylchew 202.156.2.130 |
5-Sep-04/8:45 AM |
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| Re: Meditations on a Human Skeleton in a Museum by Sasha |
Blue Magpie 212.205.251.7 |
5-Sep-04/9:19 AM |
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| regarding some deleted poem... |
Blue Magpie 212.205.251.7 |
5-Sep-04/9:25 AM |
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Given your use of repitition here you might want to consider rewriting this as a Villanelle, or other repeating format.
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| Re: Broken Sonnet by Sasha |
Blue Magpie 212.205.251.7 |
5-Sep-04/9:26 AM |
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| Re: The American Soldier by x0lovelylarnx0 |
Blue Magpie 212.205.251.7 |
5-Sep-04/9:33 AM |
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Nice to see such intelligent constructive interaction, considering I haven't seen one correctly written sonnet yet I sense a certain imagery of pots and kettles here.
Not that the poem is any good, but the criticism is for the most part worse.
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| Re: Dawn Jig by ?-Dave_Mysterious-? |
Blue Magpie 212.205.251.7 |
5-Sep-04/9:35 AM |
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Could you explain how this gets to be called a sonnet???????????
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| regarding some deleted poem... |
Tintagiles 207.179.133.236 |
5-Sep-04/9:42 AM |
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Suddenly I remember why I haven't been here in a while...
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| regarding some deleted poem... |
Blue Magpie 212.205.251.35 |
5-Sep-04/9:46 AM |
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It is not iambic pentametre either.
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| Re: The Conqueror Worm by zodiac |
Blue Magpie 212.205.251.35 |
5-Sep-04/9:53 AM |
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Spreading Sturm und drang across two lines looks very poor, you ae breaking aconcept where no concept should be broken, still there is some nice imagery here, made me remember being an undergraduate.
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| Re: Edges by Blue Magpie |
Dovina 24.52.157.176 |
5-Sep-04/10:22 AM |
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This is the kind of poem that wins contests. It probably brought loud applause if you read it before an audience. It has the normally desired elements. And donât get me wrong, I enjoy its flow and appreciate the images and descriptions. But it sacrifices meaning for prose, follow-through for rhythm. It is like a beautiful melody having lyrics that seem beautiful because of their attachment to the music.
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| Re: A Poem by BigB |
Dovina 24.52.157.176 |
5-Sep-04/10:26 AM |
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Maybe a more descriptive title might have eased my misunderstanding or failure to know what you mean.
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| Re: Stand Up For Yourself !!! by Brandy_n_Cali |
Dovina 24.52.157.176 |
5-Sep-04/10:29 AM |
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An essay. A statement of position. Not a poem. I agree with you.
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| Re: Pride by Dovina |
Dan garcia-Black 66.159.205.204 |
5-Sep-04/1:40 PM |
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'Creep in to her in the night"
Into her room or back to the uterus?
"And settle for knowing she knows" possibly
"And settle for knowing she knows more."
Does this change what you are saying or make it clearer? -8- maybe a -10- if I were not confused by those two lines.
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| Re: Crazy about you by nicole081083 |
sliver 63.190.72.100 |
5-Sep-04/4:38 PM |
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Actually, my eyes are blue-green.
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| regarding some deleted poem... |
sliver 63.190.72.100 |
5-Sep-04/4:46 PM |
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Sometimes it's easier to just let life pull you along, just keep your sights ahead and you can use your mind and soul as a kind of rudder to direct you.
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| Re: dying love by singinkygal |
sliver 63.190.72.100 |
5-Sep-04/4:48 PM |
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Sometimes separation is the only avenue.
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| Re: Like A Rainbow by jasondingus |
sliver 63.190.72.100 |
5-Sep-04/4:50 PM |
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Why can't she be the yellow and you the blue, or maybe purple?
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