| regarding some deleted poem... |
Dan garcia-Black 66.159.205.135 |
6-Aug-04/8:41 AM |
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| Re: A Beautiful Pain by timtonio |
New Life Drug 69.106.227.126 |
6-Aug-04/12:11 AM |
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| regarding some deleted poem... |
New Life Drug 69.106.227.126 |
6-Aug-04/12:17 AM |
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| Re: Honey by Jeremi B. Handrinos |
Dan garcia-Black 66.159.205.135 |
6-Aug-04/8:25 AM |
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Something about this is...
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| Re: The World Through One Eye by timtonio |
New Life Drug 69.106.227.126 |
6-Aug-04/12:07 AM |
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| Re: Concussion + Broken Hearts= bad week by New Life Drug |
Jeremi B. Handrinos 24.130.62.63 |
6-Aug-04/12:56 AM |
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| Re: Concussion + Broken Hearts= bad week by New Life Drug |
Dan garcia-Black 66.159.205.135 |
6-Aug-04/8:05 AM |
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Imagine how bad it would have been
Without the Vicodin!
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| Re: Solid Understanding by Dovina |
richa 81.178.216.59 |
6-Aug-04/6:34 AM |
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1) 'simplest'
2) mimic and parrot mean the same thing
3) Not sure the second verse follows on so well from 'non of it true'
4) If someone changes expression it is immediately lost, that is a truism not a fear.
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| Re: Marina by INTRANSIT |
INTRANSIT 64.12.116.70 |
6-Aug-04/8:36 AM |
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Here. Let me douse this "poem" with the only score that actually befits such a pompous fog.1
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| Re: Sleep by Shade_dreamer |
some deleted user 66.163.13.31 |
6-Aug-04/8:03 AM |
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Ummm... No... There is a definite rythm to this poem.
(There's a couple of errors ;), but definitely rythm :P)
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| Re: Solid Understanding by Dovina |
Dan garcia-Black 66.159.205.135 |
6-Aug-04/8:10 AM |
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The inimate moment is lost not only the expression? If that is the meaning then the 2nd verse could use a bit o' rewrite. At this public moment -8-
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| Re: Existence by Bobjim |
electroman1979 198.81.26.16 |
5-Aug-04/9:46 PM |
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i like, short, sweet, and accurate -9-
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| Re: nuevo progreso by unknown^user |
SupremeDreamer 63.93.98.232 |
5-Aug-04/9:21 PM |
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Quite nice, enjoyed reading it. Blessed with eight, go in peace.
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| Re: Missing Grand Miss. by timtonio |
New Life Drug 69.106.227.126 |
6-Aug-04/12:10 AM |
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reminded me of Loretta Lynn
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| Re: Summer crush by sk8rs_rule_all |
SupremeDreamer 63.93.98.232 |
5-Aug-04/9:09 PM |
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If this were a pimple, It would be nine. But its not, so have a six.
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| regarding some deleted poem... |
Dan garcia-Black 66.159.205.135 |
6-Aug-04/8:22 AM |
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Evocative images. Old saying,"If you introduce a gun in the third stanza, it should go off in the fourth." I'd like to see you spending your life shooting some hoops with those fine basketball shoes on your feet. Good poem.
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| Re: To My Little Known Love by MacFrantic |
New Life Drug 69.106.227.126 |
6-Aug-04/12:18 AM |
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barbie and ken parted ways. now Blaine's the man. its terrible.
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| Re: Solid Understanding by Dovina |
Jeremi B. Handrinos 24.130.62.63 |
6-Aug-04/12:57 AM |
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I hated the ending, it would do better to rhyme.
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| Re: Mike Pike!! by DR Limerick |
richa 81.178.216.59 |
6-Aug-04/6:27 AM |
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'not wanting to linger/he stuck in his finger' sounds better.
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| regarding some deleted poem... |
massangel62 205.188.116.70 |
6-Aug-04/6:27 AM |
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i don't think that poem was confusing, i understand it quite well.
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