Re: Wind by Dovina	Dan garcia-Black 66.159.205.205	13-Jul-04/11:43 AM
Is it 'voices' promising us life as the wind drives the heavy, cold, dead clouds? What are the voices saying? I may be missing a key point, I admit. I am not good with nature. If this were about a 1957 Chevy BelAir, I'd have a better grasp of the subject matter. But I like the sound of the words blowing around in this poem.
regarding some deleted poem...	Dovina 24.52.157.176	13-Jul-04/12:11 PM
Is it a sorry waste? Do the greyhounds race again? I’m not good with greyhounds and Chevys, racing and all. If this were about the wind, I'd have a better grasp of the subject matter. But I like the sound of howling dogs and mournful words blowing around in this poem.
Re: MR Blobby V bill and ben by MR Blobby	DR Limerick 213.48.74.235	13-Jul-04/12:21 PM
No i tink ing diz iz z bill and z ben from uk tv yar
Re: Drinking Knowledge by gregsamsa222	Dan garcia-Black 66.159.205.205	13-Jul-04/12:47 PM
Contemporary takes artifical sweetner. -10- Religion takes bread and wine.
Re: Drinking Knowledge by gregsamsa222	Dovina 24.52.157.176	13-Jul-04/1:06 PM
Poetry takes vino, vinegar and caster oil.
regarding some deleted poem...	god'swife 4.231.183.246	13-Jul-04/1:44 PM
The metaphor goes on for too long. Try editing out the preposition after 'hanging'. Also the one after subject. I don't think the parathetical at the end of the poem adds anything. I like the poem.
regarding some deleted poem...	Dovina 24.52.157.176	13-Jul-04/10:06 AM
Stay! Please don't go. The cool woods of the northeast in July, what could be finer, not Carolina. "The mountain slips by" The Old Man slips off his perch. Let's glue him back together like humpty-dumpty.
regarding some deleted poem...	Dovina 24.52.157.176	13-Jul-04/10:09 AM
No doubt a take on the recent arguement about indentation and spacing. In this case space is everything.
regarding some deleted poem...	wilco 66.162.22.123	13-Jul-04/10:31 AM
If the man wants to indent his shit, then who cares.
regarding some deleted poem...	wilco 66.162.22.123	13-Jul-04/10:35 AM
This is more along he lines of what I expect from you. I think the last one could be good with more work, though.
Re: A Girl’s Climax by Dovina	MR Blobby 213.48.74.235	13-Jul-04/11:28 AM
Blobby blobby blob!!
Re: MR Blobby V bill and ben by MR Blobby	Dan garcia-Black 66.159.205.205	13-Jul-04/11:34 AM
Is flob a typo? shouldn't it be "Blob alob, alob?" Nice ending.
regarding some deleted poem...	Dovina 24.52.157.176	13-Jul-04/10:38 AM
I come away with a good feeling about this without much in the way of logical connections. Much of poetry is about how we feel rather than how we understand, and the blank space adds to the feeling. I also write notes to myself about the pigeons walk and such.
regarding some deleted poem...	Dan garcia-Black 66.159.205.139	13-Jul-04/6:54 AM
"With each look, my heart you steal" Why didn't you write "We go outside the grill to start... you steal my heart?" Because it doesn't fit with the conversational tone of the rest of the poem. When you reverse the order of words to make something rhyme it makes one pause and wonder why it could not have been said in a more natural way. However, the internal rhyme in "I still can’t believe that you are mine I am my best when I'm- with you." gave me pause in appreciation that it wasn't "you are mine...when with you I'm." "it is an over-used line" is very true. The best part of this poem is that the image of the family gathering and significant other makes it through the maze of cliches. I, too, would have quit reading after life/ strife (it's a moon/ June) but I'm trying to give a 'good read' to everything. If I ignore the aforementioned negatives, I'll -7- the poem on the strength of the feelings-- comfort and satisfaction.
Re: Dylan's Odyssey. by Don-Quixote	Dan garcia-Black 66.159.205.139	13-Jul-04/7:02 AM
Tambourine man and candy man mean the same thing so this works for me.
regarding some deleted poem...	Dan garcia-Black 66.159.205.139	13-Jul-04/7:23 AM
Very good. I notice the period and then the QUIM. At times it seems that life is more about the periods than about the Quim. Well, there's always the foreign "Poontang" to look into.
regarding some deleted poem...	edpeterson 68.79.6.59	13-Jul-04/7:27 AM
sweet fern raises a question that i cannot answer. are ferns sweet?
regarding some deleted poem...	edpeterson 68.79.6.59	13-Jul-04/7:29 AM
a triumph
regarding some deleted poem...	Shuushin 147.154.235.52	13-Jul-04/7:38 AM
Apparently - there is a cure for poison ivy around here that is made from "sweet fern tea". (haven't tried it myself though)
Re: A Girl’s Climax by Dovina	daveslady 63.187.200.55	13-Jul-04/11:36 AM
I love the poem but isn't it sad what people put them selves through just to get noticed by others? Why can't we just be our selves and still get noticed? The one that notices you then will truely appreciate who you are compared to the one who notices you for the mask that you put on.