Re: 1969 by w~* ATHENA *~w	TwilightDawned 24.69.255.205	10-Jul-04/11:59 AM
..no.
Re: Preacher Man by masticatedmess	TwilightDawned 24.69.255.205	10-Jul-04/12:00 PM
You had some rhyme scheme..untill the last part.
regarding some deleted poem...	some deleted user 24.222.81.233	10-Jul-04/12:01 PM
INSIPID A frolicking menstrual cramp.
Re: There's Always Sunday by Shardik	some deleted user 24.222.81.233	10-Jul-04/12:04 PM
INSIPID horus8...this is your mother speaking...I have taken over the flabby body of tchee...
Re: Somber Like My Pain by TwilightDawned	some deleted user 24.222.81.233	10-Jul-04/12:07 PM
INSIPID A walloping pile.
Re: The Ladies and the Bum by Dovina	some deleted user 24.222.81.233	10-Jul-04/12:08 PM
INSIPID A superb title.
Re: Innocence Having Been Lost by dougsoderstrom	richa 81.178.242.35	10-Jul-04/2:08 PM
So you have a problem with islamic terrorists and christians dropping cluster bombs and people dying and that members of the army do what they are told. Big whoop.
Re: Innocence Having Been Lost by dougsoderstrom	Dovina 24.52.157.176	10-Jul-04/2:22 PM
I usually yawn at this sort of political rant. But it's not a bad rendition of a familiar chant
Re: Tweenager, they're called now. by fevriere	richa 81.178.242.35	10-Jul-04/2:24 PM
"Thus is more than you can aim unto," Is a strange thing to say for a tweenager. Must have been watching Dawson's creek I guess. I get the feeling of someone moving into young adulthood. There is apprehension in 'make a wanton of me' (I am guessing you use wanton in its precise sense of unchaste). The relationship between the tweenager and the narrator is unclear. The same person, a younger sister maybe. There is an elegance in the poem, a clear progression and a certain feeling of reflection. Very good.
Re: Ze invsible limerick by DR Limerick	INTRANSIT 204.110.228.254	10-Jul-04/3:57 PM
rrrrrrrrRRRRRRRIPOFF!!!!!!
Re: Not Being Me by pinay_miss_azn	Rodavlas 141.151.88.143	10-Jul-04/6:25 PM
because feeling cold is the only way we can remember what it feels like to be warm. And HOW you are is very different than WHO you are. I would work on the WHO part and let the HOW follow. Keep it up. It sounds like you have a lot more to let out.
Re: Friends Forever? by nicole081083	Rodavlas 141.151.88.143	10-Jul-04/6:44 PM
quick poem.
regarding some deleted poem...	horus8 24.130.62.63	10-Jul-04/6:53 PM
razorgrin
Re: Bach by Rodavlas	Shuushin 207.5.211.177	10-Jul-04/7:19 PM
The rhymes aint too bad at all; unforced, and I was liking the sonnet-like structure - until the last line. that has to go, really does.
Re: Ze invsible limerick by DR Limerick	Shuushin 207.5.211.177	10-Jul-04/6:06 AM
Cute idea. Let me try an invisible comment:
Re: The Ladies and the Bum by Dovina	Shuushin 207.5.211.177	10-Jul-04/6:15 AM
try: "(I usually spend the night there)" "but strong to pull up her" is awkward, D. Is the lawn powerful enought to earn a capital? "if she leaves it unsecured" can go. Interesting stacato cadence - intentional?
regarding some deleted poem...	Shuushin 207.5.211.177	10-Jul-04/6:17 AM
nice title. I'd rather see it left after "...can."; the rest is a chewey burrito of suspect ingredient.
Re: The Ladies and the Bum by Dovina	?-Dave_Mysterious-? 80.42.75.189	10-Jul-04/6:18 AM
You deleted all my comments. Unprofessional.
regarding some deleted poem...	Sasha 69.138.239.19	10-Jul-04/6:40 AM
68.124.81.110 68.124.81.110 68.124.81.110 This is hilarious. I looked at my ratings and the three poems that were on the "Best" list had recieved a 0 from the above IP. So I figured, whoever got above me on the Best list was the one who voted on them. I also realized that since they were literally within seconds of each other the voter had no time to actually read the poems. I noticed your Username there on the best list, just above my own. So I checked on who voted on yours. It turns out 68.124.81.110 voted on ALL of your poems, yes ALL of them on July 9th. Not only that, but they were all tens. So, 68.124.81.110, or crystal lane swift, I understand how much your vote inflation means to you, but don't give other people 0's just because they're better than you. It makes you look as bad as you really are.
regarding some deleted poem...	Sasha 69.138.239.19	10-Jul-04/6:41 AM
68.124.81.110 68.124.81.110 68.124.81.110 This is hilarious. I looked at my ratings and the three poems that were on the "Best" list had recieved a 0 from the above IP. So I figured, whoever got above me on the Best list was the one who voted on them. I also realized that since they were literally within seconds of each other the voter had no time to actually read the poems. I noticed your Username there on the best list, just above my own. So I checked on who voted on yours. It turns out 68.124.81.110 voted on ALL of your poems, yes ALL of them on July 9th. Not only that, but they were all tens. So, 68.124.81.110, or crystal lane swift, I understand how much your vote inflation means to you, but don't give other people 0's just because they're better than you. It makes you look as bad as you really are.