| Re: a comment on Fastso by Dovina |
edpeterson 68.79.52.31 |
8-Mar-05/10:02 AM |
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| Re: Fat girls Who Wear Short Skirts During Winter Quarter by DurtKL |
edpeterson 68.79.52.31 |
8-Mar-05/9:59 AM |
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yah. this gives me a chubby.
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| Re: a comment on Beetwen by Dovina |
Dovina 12.72.3.142 |
8-Mar-05/7:22 AM |
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Thatâs great that he was able to read it. Did he get all of the words, even metamorphose? Even if he didnât, but figured out the way it works, thatâs good for a fifth grader. Maybe they have an easier time of bringing order to chaos than we do.
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| Re: a comment on Beetwen by Dovina |
Dovina 12.72.3.142 |
8-Mar-05/7:21 AM |
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| Re: a comment on Beetwen by Dovina |
Dovina 12.72.3.142 |
8-Mar-05/7:21 AM |
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I donât know what painter you mean. Glad you understood it and got what I was saying in a cryptic way.
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| Re: a comment on Beetwen by Dovina |
Dovina 12.72.3.142 |
8-Mar-05/7:20 AM |
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Metamorphose â yes. Bunk â no. Wingdings would make it completely illegible, and anyone can do that. I wanted it barely legible, with just enough pattern so the reader can see order in apparent chaos.
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| Re: a comment on Fastso by Dovina |
Dovina 12.72.3.142 |
8-Mar-05/7:07 AM |
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I was hoping the reader would infer something about the woman from the last line - that being unliked herself, she understands the feelings this boy must have. Otherwise the poem would be merely a description of the fat boy, and the woman just an observer. You seem to see this. To say more about her would detract, I think, from the blunt focus on the fat boy, and overcomplicate the story.
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| Re: a comment on Fastso by Dovina |
Dovina 12.72.3.142 |
8-Mar-05/6:55 AM |
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To sweep clean the pavement because it is smelly. But I still think fat people are jollier on average than non-fat people, be they poor or not. I donât know the reason for this, but is appears true.
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| Re: Fat girls Who Wear Short Skirts During Winter Quarter by DurtKL |
Stephen Robins 213.146.148.199 |
8-Mar-05/5:23 AM |
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have you ever been to Cardiff? - 10 -
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| Re: Fastso by Dovina |
blacksoul 204.215.33.111 |
8-Mar-05/3:27 AM |
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I guess every smart ass comment is an image of the speaker's character?
I don't think so! It's there opinion!
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| Re: Beetwen by Dovina |
blacksoul 204.215.33.111 |
8-Mar-05/3:17 AM |
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Dovina I let my son read your poem he's in the fifth grade, and they are just beginning to study chaos. He was very amazed the way you had it organized.
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| Re: a comment on Fastso by Dovina |
richa 81.178.193.41 |
8-Mar-05/3:01 AM |
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Poor people are more likely to be fat, diseased, alcoholic, smokers, drug addicts, criminals, victims of crime, depressed, schizophrenic. You call this an irrelevance and then criticise an gentleman's portrayal of poorness as a bit smelly. Let me ask you this. Is it better to sweep clean the pavement because it is smelly or to not sweep clean the smelly pavement because you believe it to be jolly?
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| Re: Beetwen by Dovina |
al-naafiysh 204.215.33.111 |
8-Mar-05/2:45 AM |
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| Re: a comment on Pilgrim by richa |
richa 81.178.193.41 |
8-Mar-05/2:43 AM |
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I am not entirely happy with the third verse, but I thought the first two came off rather well.
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| Re: a comment on Ode by James Rykelangeli |
James Rykelangeli 169.229.90.109 |
8-Mar-05/1:16 AM |
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Rod, I've told you before -- please stay off my computer. Thanks.
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| Re: Ode by James Rykelangeli |
James Rykelangeli 169.229.90.109 |
8-Mar-05/1:14 AM |
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| Re: a comment on Pilgrim by richa |
richa 81.178.193.41 |
8-Mar-05/12:02 AM |
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Virgins for the puritans came from the idea that your time on earth is toil to contrast with heaven. In effect your reward in heaven is the opposite of your discipline on earth.
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| Re: Fastso by Dovina |
James Rykelangeli 169.229.90.109 |
7-Mar-05/11:33 PM |
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clear and clever imagery. the last two stanzas, however, are tritely phrased in comparison with the rest. also, since we don't know anything about the speaker, that she sympathizes with our corpulent friend has no effect on the reader beyond allowing him or her to make an inference about the speaker's character. otherwise, an enjoyable poem.
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| Re: Memories by RION12 |
DaRkMoOnLuVeR 67.162.99.24 |
7-Mar-05/8:35 PM |
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Jebus, this is why I say you are my best friend. . .New one, you should've read me it first, Eli!!! >.< I love it. You know why, too.
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| Re: A friend told me by RION12 |
DaRkMoOnLuVeR 67.162.99.24 |
7-Mar-05/8:29 PM |
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Dude, Eli, who told u that?! I don't remember ME saying that. . .Was it Sergio?! Anyway, LOVELY! MY VERY FIRST FAV!
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