-=Dark_Angel=-, P.I.
replying on asleep in the night by saylor3000
5 Jun 2004, 5:11 PM
Into a time capsule.
Tug off again probably.
Someone put them in the bin.
Your job is to act as on-board sex receptacle.
show me. dont tell me
Not half bad in my op.
ing weakens the verbiage. i want more immediancy from you
Just thought I'd try my hand at a country song (I do live in Tennessee, after all).
It's git, you dumbass. And women can't be gits. It's against the rules.
Maybe that's because he's not talking about the poem "Howl" by Allen Ginsberg.
Gangs of New York, all gussied up. Listen and fix the hiccups.
Of the two, this ones funnier. If they ever see a book, they should be on the same page or back to back.
Does the figure wear a tall hat? Is it cloaked in a cloak? Is it arm-ed with prawnes? Scary indeed.
love the last stanza
there are some weak parts such as: "So bland a feeling,
Not being able to sayâ¦
What you feel and think,
Needing savior from an ego that consumes."
but improve the flow and the poem will improve alot.
good job.
You chose not to capitalize (howl). Interesting.
I think I need some Poundage myself.
different from what i read most...cool.
you would you fat get!!
dear lady you cart call a poem crap just cos its not about you
just did.. i like it a lot.. thanx!