AskittlesK
replying on Their Little Girl 2 by AskittlesK
28 Feb 2004, 10:09 PM
o ! I didn't know that you could do that. I just joined poem ranker. So what did u mean by the comment you put on I don't wanna be me???
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thanks for the factoid but nonetheless, I my motive was to be original....as if that is truly possiable anymore. I think you should stop trying to relate this to any movie or painting and take it for what it really is... a somewhat existentialistic and questioning poem.
first utterings... tuff stuff... i know where this comes from, so i know where you can definitely take this wisdom you are scratching at.
i still see some clay here...
there you go... gettin down and gritty
dont tether yourself to rhyming... let go...
ramen, a true staple i can warm to from my college days, instant satisfaction in neutral browns with little celebrations of veggies in bright re-hydrated hues.
excellent dawg
yeah, it's a combo of three. Creative, no?
In the wildest of imagination, a queen would not stoop down to the "sand" to play with a dreamer and that is the very fun denid us for no longer being seven.
To call this very fun hell, is to lampoon the heaven e no longer can have with the "sand", simply becos we are grown ups
How I would want to be seven again and dream a queen who would take the sand for heaven.
1. this isnt exactly deep.
2. Your name seriously scares me
3. okay the rymes need some work
yeah, okay, i think a 1 will do.
I really like this one. Not that i dont like it, but do the last lines work with the rest?
is this 3 haikus? cause i think a haiku ONLY has 3 lines???
I like it, the no-spaced words are hard to read, ut its got a nice ring to it
what exactly are you talking about?
Not one of my favorites, but i suppose that is because i prefer darker, more, um...sensitive poetry.
How old are you?