this is pretty bad yo

You sure have a way of inventing your own niche.

Well at least someone around here is enjoying themselves.

Any of the following titles will be fine: Flatulent Zombie III Risen Dung Astro-turd The Brown Awakening Soiled Ambulations The Thomas Brown Affair

dung

loose the "his" and make a change to "corrects a branch" (singular is more powerful here, methinks; adds to the implied perfection)

changed the hacksaw in edit

Lots of really nice imagery. I like the sun cradled by branches and ref. to crossed legs of a cow - nice way to express that black branches white body thing birches do. Maybe "calf" would express a thinner body?? At first I thought it was "crow", and I liked that for different reasons (easy way to show lots of small branches) - so, an option, I guess (I might use that!). Hacksaw? Though you may be expressing a sarcstic point of view, universally bonsai refers to growing a plant or a tree in a dish or shallow pot (thats what the word means) - so, I'm having trouble with the title. Forgive my rambling (again), but I could live with the title if the ranger were to make a very small cut with clippers or something, even on a full sized tree - in this way you could keep all of your well-made scenery. Hey, maybe add a modifier to the title to compensate for the context?

I can see the picture you've painted, but why a hacksaw? What metal is he cutting?

Felt the worst? not too bad Robb, it could stand to flow more smoothly I think.

kill crimson

good play with words, needs more though

good this, my favourite lines being: 'unfortunate in their isolation/of any form of education.' and 'beating immigrants with broken English'

Long Time Gone

A human life is six feet deep is not very subtle, and water licks the concrete I would associate with the shallow end (certainly not the deep end only). Other than that very good, especially the flow and line breaks.

Needs a few clues as to what actions were wrong