dragonfly
on An early apology to the Hiltons by Shardik
2 Dec 2003, 4:00 PM
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SCHWEEEEEEEEEEEEET! I LOVE this poem. The flow, the vocab, the forward thrusting cadence. 10!
I'm not sure what's more interesting, the flow, structure, depth, simplicity, or the votes and comments. hehe. Good piece.
A bit too dogmatic for my taste,
but I give you points for staying on track with
your theme throughout the whole poem.
The real feeling comes through.
It comes across as a bit trite, but still
heart-felt.
good rhythm I think. Acid does not ache you though, it burns. In fact acid rain is too weak to do much at all, dissolve gravestones slowly perhaps.
It has potential, I'll give it a 7.
Not bad this, the best I have seen of yours. To fit all of your poems into this one eccentric style is a mistake, form should not be arbitrary.
For once the form works here I think, the slowness, and also the short length so it doesn't hurt the eyes too much.
I'd like to take a shit on this, but it would be a waste of my time.
eh?
nice clear thought-line...finally. acquiesced with a 10!
Angst-nog topped with a dash of nice. A great desert poem. Good work!
I hat you the most.
I hat you more!
I hat you.
This by far, and away, is Pulitzer material to the bone! I am the ONE! At least my socks think so.
You should leap into a good poem.
Big fat bear crotch.