thepinkbunnyofdoom
on Be the best, and nothing but by Hostileintent
31 Aug 2003, 11:23 AM
Nice all round. The an in the first line peaks my curiousity a little but I've seen it before. I think you should have kept the repeat of 2nd and 4th line going til the end, but other than that a -8-. I see potential.
Catchy...and disturbing. Nice mix!
Billy D
also, though: the title? "troublemaker"?
this, as a whole, eclipses most else i've read of yours.
an aura of...tenderness, perhaps?
i've forgotten the exact word, at the moment, but inverted paternalism is what i'm trying to get to.
many more questions, though: is it based on a specific person? the..err..rest of the questions will have to wait till later, because i must zoomph into offline mode.
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again, thank you.
Awesome, dude. Thanks for recommending this system to me. Keep on rockin' in the free world. NWA (Yes, those are my real initials.)
I don't even know where to start with the praise so I won't. Lots of good stuff in there though.
In the end they didn't fix it. They gave you something to cling to. A pain of your own. Something you could come baack to again & again. when I was a girl and my parents would argue I'd lie quiet in my bed and place my hand against the coolness of the wall. It felt like death and salvation all at once.
This is just so horrible.
hrmm.. heh. 9.
Y3Kscampoet? scam?.. trust me man, i dont make any money.
And i dont step on his tails.. i simply talk alot, its my current disease.
Your taking all his negro hate and such seriously..
"this is purposeful and extended cruelty."
well, fuck.. damn him for being realistic.. yup.. bub.. duh.
I am close to cracking the code to humanity. That is all.
ok, labeled correctly, your the pimple master!
Correction: she isnt french. she is belgian.
and why?.. because she was born in belgium?.. as was my father?.. why the hell do you bother asking this question?
the second stanza, with the "none to see" didn't fit in my head, but the imagery is beautiful. the idea is beautiful.
Well done. 10.
Jeremi B. Handrinos
replying on Burning your desert down by Jeremi B. Handrinos
30 Aug 2003, 1:45 PM
lol.
I am offended by the use of the term "tarantula holes". Remove it immediately. __________8.3
Change needs to occur at a cellular level to be successful.
Why is your mother French?