poetandknowit
on I, Ann Boleyn by http://mulberryfairy
31 Jul 2003, 12:50 PM
Really, I am shallow and cannot get past the fact that you are an unshaven woman. I am sorry. Forgive me. I knew that plum was yours but I ate it anyway. Besides my narrow-minded view, which again I apologize for, I am quite fond of this.
pleasures.
and, haha! there is a tango in the very first line. i was even naked when i wrote it. so there.
and you, you fool, you went to trivia. i hope you had fun with paul.
you have been invited. don't go crying over spilt lines.
Yes, I decided to take pity on you all.
Yes, but you are not going to see the Eels with me. and that makes all the difference.
come now, "when my lines stick" is far superior to that one! for a poet, especially! i woke up with 6 beer cans on the floor this morning, and this poem on the rankler.
geez, i am tuned up today.
indeed, i believe you did. and then you mentioned something about a laptop, a couch, and a baby on the way. woe is me! but not as woe as you, because i am going to see the EELS TONIGHT!!!!!!!!!!!!
hahahhahahahahaha!!!!!!!!!!!!!
I guess the ranker has hit it's stride once more, what a relief. things sure were crappy around here for a while. As good a poem as I have ever read. Inspired "I don't like to touch you either" multi-meanings and a nice strong bite to it. I love that line so much I wish I had invented it myself.
Simple.
moot.
I for one, believe this is perfect, especially the title. It's Valentine's not Valentines. 10's for you.
And boring. Don't forget that.
Since I now what your writing of I feel I have an unfair advantage. I did also suggest a simple two step, without clothes I might add.
Well, well. I don't know why this poem has gotten such low ranks? It's totaly self absorbed and uninteresting. I love it!
Fan fucking tabuless. Some tiny things for flow,like the first parantheticals is that statement neccessary?
with optimistic images of the profane
Hows about- with optimistic profane images
Gray fan oscillating(edit out- at the foot)
You know stuff like that. Nip here nip there. Give it a go. See if you like it more. The last stanza and that switch-a-roo is wonderful writing. You're good.
Simple.
And don't forget Treat! He is my favorite. And I believe a good friend and neighbor of Jerimi Handrinos Britt, or visa versa.
All if you like. It is a love poem, eh?
Okey-dokey. William Carlos? Andy? Robin?