Thisis going to take weeks for me. My son is 12, sleeps in my bed, holds my hand everywhere. Tells me he loves me 5, maybe 6 times each day. He looks at me straight in the eyes.

fix the end, otherwise perfect. Less is more, more is more. I'm a whore.

Blood on the tracks. I swear, you're on to something. Find find find.

This is good, great structure, killer punch line.

"Dusking" and "same sky" you have crossed the thresh-hold, my favorite poem of yours.

Have you seen Z. She did not go to that Great White concert did she? she is a metal chic, you know. Where was it. The news here is piss poor.

A precious poem. Oh, how needing I am of the contrary point of view. This is a great poem, especially when spoken aloud. The last couplet's a true killer. I think you are under appreciated, congratulations, the world knows nothing of its greatest men.

I don't understand, but it sounds good 8+

I hope ur mom gets ur prayers this time ;)

Yeah I agree with your poem. my girlfriend left me and it really helps to write your feelings in a poem! 9++

We hope.

As a satire it's great as a poem it's shit, as toilet paper it was pace!11!picante sauce 7.