poemranker ::Omerta el prostitute by <{Baba^Yaga}>

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Omerta el prostitute

by <{Baba^Yaga}>

Member since 2002 · Posted 22 Feb 2003 · Edited 9 Jul 2003 · 21 comments

A cock crows steady for sixty seconds as a dog barks off in the distance and a car almost starts. Dark square of curtains seal out the morning, but he is still awake holding the letter with a bottle. It slowly slips out and shatters. Walking across the glass he opens the drapes and stands motionless. Two boys ride by laughing on bikes. Their seats are red & their hair brown. He presses his palm to the warm pane.

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[10] god'swife 23-Feb-03/1:35 AM Reply
Blood on the tracks. I swear, you're on to something. Find find find.

[8] Enki 23-Feb-03/3:54 PM Reply
The change eliminated ambiguity.
[n/a] <{Baba^Yaga}> › Enki 23-Feb-03/4:50 PM Reply
This is a three part series based upon the male hustler.
As far as ambiguity goes i believe it's lost none if not gained more. Because it's not aimed at prostitution in general which was my point with the series. Since the male and female world of sex for hire are two extremely different arenas, because the female prostitute deals with the opposite sex. The male prostitute deals 95% of the time with the same sex. There is no such thing as Deuce Bigelow, sorry.
[8] Enki › <{Baba^Yaga}> 23-Feb-03/5:02 PM Reply
I don't disagree and probably no comment was necessary from me. I was actually commenting on something more simple and removed from the theme of the poem. The glass as opposed to window. It was obvious but your change made it a little better.
[n/a] <{Baba^Yaga}> › Enki 23-Feb-03/5:41 PM Reply
By the way, i was wondering, Do you know what your user name means, and who Enki is... because that's a righteous name, Marduk would have been nice too, of course or innana.
[8] Enki › <{Baba^Yaga}> 23-Feb-03/5:54 PM Reply
No I am just a random san-ni-ga.
So what's cooking in the oven today?
[n/a] <{Baba^Yaga}> › Enki 23-Feb-03/4:56 PM Reply
Or did you mean from "glass" earlier to "pane" now? You do know what a pane of glass is correct, because others it's exactly pretty much the same. Unless you thought he was waiting for his prostitute wife to come home? This poem deals with the abuse of substance and the isolation from reality a young man goes through by selling himself. He is looking out the window seeing what he use to be, a little boy playing early in the morning with a friend, but now he's locked up from the light hiding, and ashamed. Does that help you any? The letter symbolizes his dwelling upon his lack of communication and love.
[8] Enki › <{Baba^Yaga}> 23-Feb-03/5:04 PM Reply
Yes see my above comment. I wasn't reading into it at all.
[8] Enki › Enki 23-Feb-03/5:43 PM Reply
Yep yep. I wonder if I should consider a career change?
[8] Enki › Enki 23-Feb-03/6:06 PM Reply
But surely as a hobby . . . ?
[n/a] Jeremi B. Handrinos › Enki 23-Feb-03/7:12 PM Reply
It's not like a hobby, because of the ridiculous amounts of money, and the constant corruption involved. At first one would like to think of it along the lines of hobby but quickley it mutates. Like Carpenter's the thing. Then you spend the rest of your time absorbed by hunting it while it hunt's youu
[8] Enki › Jeremi B. Handrinos 23-Feb-03/7:30 PM Reply
The corruption only starts when the money matters, it mutates only when it matters (or doesn't matter). Is there no way to be zen about it?
[n/a] <{Baba^Yaga}> › Enki 24-Feb-03/4:05 PM Reply
What? fuck for free, or approach it like david carridean. lol.
[8] Enki › <{Baba^Yaga}> 24-Feb-03/5:35 PM Reply
Laughs and takes it to a philosophy forum instead.
[n/a] <{Baba^Yaga}> › Enki 25-Feb-03/10:17 PM Reply
So, what was the consensus in the forum?
[8] Enki › <{Baba^Yaga}> 3-Mar-03/4:09 PM Reply
Well . . . it was decided that people aren't wearing enough hats.
[n/a] <{Baba^Yaga}> › Enki 3-Mar-03/4:59 PM Reply
As in condoms or asshats.
[8] richa 10-Jul-03/4:21 AM Reply
enjoyable to read, ambiguous yes but with certain bits to hang on to like 'boys ride by laughing on bikes'
[8] nentwined 10-Jul-03/4:40 PM Reply
"holding the letter with a bottle" -> "it slowly slips out" sounds like the letter slips out. but it shatters. ?

beyond that, rather nice. :)
[10] horus8 › nentwined 10-Jul-03/4:50 PM Reply
Yes, it shatters, meaning, I guys we know it's not a letter.
[10] horus8 › nentwined 10-Jul-03/4:50 PM Reply
(the letter that slips, that is)