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Omerta el prostitute (Free verse) by <{Baba^Yaga}>
A cock crows steady for sixty seconds as a dog barks off in the distance and a car almost starts. Dark square of curtains seal out the morning, but he is still awake holding the letter with a bottle. It slowly slips out and shatters. Walking across the glass he opens the drapes and stands motionless. Two boys ride by laughing on bikes. Their seats are red & their hair brown. He presses his palm to the warm pane.

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Posted: February 22, 2003 11:00 PM PST; Last modified: July 9, 2003 4:48 PM PDT
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[10] god'swife @ | 23-Feb-03/1:35 AM | Reply
Blood on the tracks. I swear, you're on to something. Find find find.

[8] Enki @ | 23-Feb-03/3:54 PM | Reply
The change eliminated ambiguity.
[n/a] <{Baba^Yaga}> @ > Enki | 23-Feb-03/4:50 PM | Reply
This is a three part series based upon the male hustler.
As far as ambiguity goes i believe it's lost none if not gained more. Because it's not aimed at prostitution in general which was my point with the series. Since the male and female world of sex for hire are two extremely different arenas, because the female prostitute deals with the opposite sex. The male prostitute deals 95% of the time with the same sex. There is no such thing as Deuce Bigelow, sorry.
[8] Enki @ > <{Baba^Yaga}> | 23-Feb-03/5:02 PM | Reply
I don't disagree and probably no comment was necessary from me. I was actually commenting on something more simple and removed from the theme of the poem. The glass as opposed to window. It was obvious but your change made it a little better.
[n/a] <{Baba^Yaga}> @ > Enki | 23-Feb-03/5:41 PM | Reply
By the way, i was wondering, Do you know what your user name means, and who Enki is... because that's a righteous name, Marduk would have been nice too, of course or innana.
[8] Enki @ > <{Baba^Yaga}> | 23-Feb-03/5:54 PM | Reply
No I am just a random san-ni-ga.
So what's cooking in the oven today?
[n/a] <{Baba^Yaga}> @ > Enki | 23-Feb-03/4:56 PM | Reply
Or did you mean from "glass" earlier to "pane" now? You do know what a pane of glass is correct, because others it's exactly pretty much the same. Unless you thought he was waiting for his prostitute wife to come home? This poem deals with the abuse of substance and the isolation from reality a young man goes through by selling himself. He is looking out the window seeing what he use to be, a little boy playing early in the morning with a friend, but now he's locked up from the light hiding, and ashamed. Does that help you any? The letter symbolizes his dwelling upon his lack of communication and love.
[8] Enki @ > <{Baba^Yaga}> | 23-Feb-03/5:04 PM | Reply
Yes see my above comment. I wasn't reading into it at all.
[8] Enki @ > Enki | 23-Feb-03/5:43 PM | Reply
Yep yep. I wonder if I should consider a career change?
[8] Enki @ > Enki | 23-Feb-03/6:06 PM | Reply
But surely as a hobby . . . ?
[n/a] Jeremi B. Handrinos @ > Enki | 23-Feb-03/7:12 PM | Reply
It's not like a hobby, because of the ridiculous amounts of money, and the constant corruption involved. At first one would like to think of it along the lines of hobby but quickley it mutates. Like Carpenter's the thing. Then you spend the rest of your time absorbed by hunting it while it hunt's youu
[8] Enki @ > Jeremi B. Handrinos | 23-Feb-03/7:30 PM | Reply
The corruption only starts when the money matters, it mutates only when it matters (or doesn't matter). Is there no way to be zen about it?
[n/a] <{Baba^Yaga}> @ > Enki | 24-Feb-03/4:05 PM | Reply
What? fuck for free, or approach it like david carridean. lol.
[8] Enki @ > <{Baba^Yaga}> | 24-Feb-03/5:35 PM | Reply
Laughs and takes it to a philosophy forum instead.
[n/a] <{Baba^Yaga}> @ > Enki | 25-Feb-03/10:17 PM | Reply
So, what was the consensus in the forum?
[8] Enki @ > <{Baba^Yaga}> | 3-Mar-03/4:09 PM | Reply
Well . . . it was decided that people aren't wearing enough hats.
[n/a] <{Baba^Yaga}> @ > Enki | 3-Mar-03/4:59 PM | Reply
As in condoms or asshats.
[8] richa @ | 10-Jul-03/4:21 AM | Reply
enjoyable to read, ambiguous yes but with certain bits to hang on to like 'boys ride by laughing on bikes'
[8] nentwined @ | 10-Jul-03/4:40 PM | Reply
"holding the letter with a bottle" -> "it slowly slips out" sounds like the letter slips out. but it shatters. ?

beyond that, rather nice. :)
[10] horus8 @ > nentwined | 10-Jul-03/4:50 PM | Reply
Yes, it shatters, meaning, I guys we know it's not a letter.
[10] horus8 @ > nentwined | 10-Jul-03/4:50 PM | Reply
(the letter that slips, that is)
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