This is an absolutely disastrous attempt at poetry. First of all, the title - REALITY - great way to drive home the REALISM of your piece with both alarming and shocking clarity! Oh wait, actually it's crap. "If I were in another place, I'd be there beside you" - would you? What if that other place wasn't BEside them, but INside them? Didn't think of that one, did you!? "If it could work out" - yeah the crucial word in this phrase is "If", because actually, disableds can't "work out". They're too lazy. Not to mention stupid. I think it's time you faced up to THAT little REALITY. "If it was... but it was not" - ahhhhh but what if it actually WAS? Then your entire poeme would be a complete lie. But overall, completely ace! 10/10!!!

Sad but I see this scenario played out everyday.

Everyday.

You write well considering this isn't your native Language. Now onto this poem, It lacks any real emotion. Its just the thoughts that go with suicide. The human thought process is better left in a classroom or a debate forum.

Too incomplete. Expand on what your saying.

Needs more content but this would be a LIFE GETS BETTER AWARDE if I hadn't all ready given you one today. Trust me girlfriends come and go but the poems you write about them will haunt us forever. -8-

Been there it sux. LIFE GETS BETTER AWARDE -10-

Truth be told we only see what we want to see Tounges lie with ease Your ears are like our eyes If you gave your heart fully then when it broke you'd die Still to be fair not a bad poem -6-

Nice subject matter and I like the way you question yourself. I really think that you worked to hard to confine your thoughts to your 4 line stanza. Let those thoughts run free.

Hmmm... I like the way this sorta moves you but the language seems just a little forced. -8-