Bachus
replying on "Bored?" "Let's eat my nuts?" by Bachus
23 Dec 2002, 12:05 PM
for that guy in germany who took out an ad to kill someone, and before he killed the guy that showed up at his door ..they snacked on his 'stuff'. care for a weiner?
"coiffed" ha ha ha. nice one. "
grusome" bad mispel, the right mispel could be either grewsome, grew-some or just spelling it right. other than that, the last stanzas is kinda 'immature and pitiful' because, action is louder than words, either do something about it on paper, and or something about it in your actual life or quit fucking whining. Simply because you insult any 'real thinker' with your plea, because you obviously have the time, patience, and money to type on a keyboard and submit it here? So, therefore things can't be that dramatically critical in your life. i was at a speed freak russian immigrant with a precious five year old daughters house day before yesterday for 12 hours, her boyfriend and father of her daughter went to jail the day before. Oh yea their house was a apartment building's laundry room...i sat there and colored with that little girl for hours man..fucking out-of-time-bubble, hours.. listening to her mothers stories of how these things all came to be with ever nerve of my body mentally documenting every fiber of disaster gone epic by the second..her mother was 25 with the most beautiful chrystal clear blue eyes you've ever seen the little girl equally bright and hopefull, but i can see the future, and i saw it there..it coated the walls with a stink you've never smelled youngling, pray you don't lest you lose your mind and structure, or maybe that's what you really need. a field trip with me on one of my late night hunts..what do i hunt? what god has forgotten, so either fucking stick your hands in the box and hold it there. because describing the outside of the box just doesn't cut the mustard any more sadly. why? you ever lick plutonium coated devil horns while combing your hair with his pitch fork? that's why. take a seven and a water dunk.
"seemed but a trifle to the winged beast's hate,
But so ready was the dragon and poised to destroy
a host, when but a single man came,
that surpised, he lingered a bit too long,
and never got to direct his flame,
The warrior struck and struck again,
turning dragon to blood and gore,
and then slashed his throat, quenching forever
the fire of Dragon Lore,
For this was the last of a once proud race,
frightening and terrible to behold,
now, I'm afraid, they belong only to myth,
merely tales children beg to be told." this is where this fascinating story of yours turns into a bad commercial for life insurance. Up until that point, you were cruising.
awesome, sir.
smirk-ish.8
that's the best cell-phone comment i've ever heard. the rest is wondrous too.
Cool. I like the last line, but maybe i'm just raving mad. I don't know Mr.Bub, bachus. not to my knowledge, at least
I like it the way it is, thanks. "in your face" is an allusion to the blatant deception and pretense when sycophantic gestures are thrust at us as a way to placate, because we are supposedly so stupid as not to notice, or to not care because we are awed by the gesture itself.
like it
No wonder the title had nothing to do with the poem!
what exactly do you mean to do by posting others' work as your own?
anyone who wanted to read this can go here: http://www.bibble.org/misc/thefish.html
to read <i>Misc: The Fish</i>
By Marianne Moore
i think you need to imply that. she awoke the soul in you; she breathed fire into your being. the repeat has a lovely cadence to it, but you have left out the crux of it. be empty before and empty after--in words.
see, i thought that was what you meant, but i could have thought anything. i wanted more clues.
also, this line is confusing to me:
And every good trait of me,
did not wait for me, to represent it.
I like your writing it has a naked unimitable style but think if you condensed some of your work it would assault the senses more. I cant help but laugh in disbelief at the 0 vote, people spend so much time creating their best for a split second vote violating junkie - have what it deserves a 6 with potential
***9** your a talent Mr Z.