INTRANSIT
on The Coming Light by poetandknowit
23 Dec 2002, 2:38 PM
I feel something secondary going on here. Can't find it yet. I'll come back.
typos, oh typos how I would love it if there were no typos.
S-3 cornfuses me a bit. I am getting young lust from it though.
see. i knew i ripped some sad bastard off. cheers. the wicky is sacred and since you agree. 9. also meeps are very tasteful too.
i still think clock should be cock.
7 for the effort. tear it down, weld and machine the crank,magnaflux the rods, new slugs,jugs and plugs. bearings. It'll run good.
perfect. except for the fact that you wrote it of course.
you know what's funny about the best list here at poemranker? the way it shifts ever so predictably. i wasn't thinking stan boardman (whoever on god's green earth would? except for you of course) at all more like a jerry louis marathon, but without the muscular ailment, just more ale.
HMMM, the poem has such potential, the first stanza is filled with anger and passion but as the poem draws to a final conclusion the overal objective is somehwta lost between the C and the K...close but only a 9!
thank god. then he wouldn't exist..bernies lyrics are great, and the missing link.
not complicated i've read to many poems here a couple thousand? nah?yeah. that's alot of fives. lol. also i wanted to see if like attract's like (how many fives this'll get) bachus once told me he was amazed to find out how many people wanted to read about fucking cousins and babysitters..i thought interesting. very very interesting the way our minds work.
friction in the earth creates mountains where wonderful things live and grow. you'll be a mountain yet.
Actually, come to think of it, maybe those seven pills could be viagra...perhaps that many would cause so much blood to leave your head (the one up top that is) that you pass out?
i counted, there would be 14 large islands left over (being the tops of certain mountains. lets name them?
Many people have told me that the best cure for lonliness is masturbation.
Rather good, have seen the title somewhere before, Master Pratchett? Good poem, although horus8 is right, the end isn't quite as good as the rest.
Have been writing a poem about a dragon myself, if I can change it into a decent poem from the pretentious pile of shite it is now, I may even post it...still like this poem-8
okay here goes. i went to see your homepage, and i'm a bit confused did you get the pills from, mom, britt, or just some weird doctor. lol. also are you a real distressed human young lady, or a drunk old lonely man with a crippled and psychotic imagination? regardless of all of that said..this poem is to punkrock what moist towelletes are to steak eaters at a casino somewhere in winnemucca nevada.
Yes indeed you did get to number one...that was yesterday, this is today...and some gay twat has already brought you down from 7.44 to 6.7 something...with a ridiculously (unjustified) low vote
Why not redo the poem but leave this version on...I think it's a brilliant piece, and I'm sure most people agree...in my opinion this deserves a place in the top five whatever the critics say...wonderful stuff