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replying on The Devil Made Her Do It by Limness
17 Oct 2002, 11:12 AM
ironically, the limness poem right before this was regarding that. psychic indeed. what do you see in my future, o beaked one?
not so much this, as the others. i'm aware that this is new. it just seems alot of folks were slate wiping these days and i just thought it was oddly coincidental. that's all.for some the devil means something mysteriously vague and bad?it's all about change though, upside down. rightside up is bound by routine unable to change. tied to your ways and past. that's what mr.chows fortune cookie told me yesterday when i went orange chicken crazy..
I really like it; perhaps the pushee could end up in the Milky Way black hole.
It's good but I can see why you want to fix it up a bit. I'll print this and stare at it a while. There's nothing obvious.
yeah... everyone picks on the fat kid and I don't know why... somebody should teach that kid how to fight back :o)
Playful.
interesting read soccer :o)
Fair enough. But she's quite cute.
Burn that book. She's a terrible poet.
Is that Jewel as in the singer? I had no idea she wrote poetry.
Hee hee hee.
Will do. I think I have a small flare for grandness and thats why my coffee thing worked. Shakespeare would fit. I'll try some of your reccomendations. I have a couple of mixed poetry books that give me a sample of many. As childish as it may seem, I would recommend: A night without armor by Jewel.
I don't have a problem with it either. it seems a very succinct way of ending the poem. Goddammit, I like it. But there's no accounting for taste. And thanks for your message Mrs G.
It not's disjointed to me. Drive is perfect. The word puts her in a car, with foggy glass between her and stranger. I had no trouble with it. He's watching her roll out the drive, inexpressive look on his face, arms hanging down at his sides.
All we're saying is that it seems disjointed. If the word 'drive' were changed to 'go' or some other one-syllable word saying the same thing, I believe it would work better.
I think in this case you're better sticking with capitalism, launch in on Bush etc in something new. As for reading - well, the people who got me writing were T.S. Eliot, Robert Frost, Edward Thomas, a modern Brit called Simon Armitage, Philip Larkin, and Wordsworth, Keats, Coleridge etc. Read some Shakespeare, esp. the sonnets, because he will tell you everything you need to know about handling forms and rhymes and ideas in a small space. Read Yeats for the manic highs and lows. And follow your nose - if you find a good side route from one of these chaps, follow it. Of course, these are just my faves - other people will give you other names.
This sounds so familiar... a crook with a smile on his face, saying how great this is and how stupid you'd be without it... great read :o)
Maybe 'twould be better if I went the capitalistic route? What/whose writing would you recommend I read? Thanks for the flowers.
actually, that's how i read it as well.
You can always rely on me for a completely bizarre reading of things. It's either genius or extreme stupidity, I can't decide which!