Re: Voice of the World by Dovina	Prince of Void 77.237.64.89	10-Jan-08/11:14 AM
How many hopeless people are suffering ? Within the voiceless world and who’s behind this show ? who’s that child ? demonstrating the deep sense of famine in the heart of the heartless world Who’s running this world ? Why some folks can’t raise their voice ? As well as it raise so may questions In their bare minds and also abomination Far from the great expecation of human kind Could we understand how they live ? In the context of despairs Or in the mataphore of the wasteland Where you are blamed To build their worlds upon the toxic wastland And you started to obsever What they react insead of the word “ living” All they’re reactions or expermints on them It has only one message after all The show must go on for your better life and world You cant help yourself watching the opera The opear of third world Childern’re playing in the dumping ground While you try to be more sympathetic Because that’s entertaining you It’s not the reality of your life dealing with it ..it’s the dumping world and a good senior of a opera while the future is still bleak for them day after day they face their fatal fate you still dump things and they die in the dumping grave
Re: Cormac Plays by Skamper	INTRANSIT 69.23.157.197	8-Jan-08/2:06 PM
Zero Mostell. Hah! Great stuff.
Re: # 2 by Lifeboatman	Prince of Void 77.237.64.43	31-Dec-07/11:09 AM
every minutes u described it was very intersting to me I like it because of this lyric is more cinematic than the others
Re: a comment on Running Local by INTRANSIT	INTRANSIT 69.23.157.197	31-Dec-07/6:48 AM
Neither. Pretty straightforward actually. Don't be lazy, D.
Re: a comment on Flickering Eyes by Jessina	Jessina 203.199.41.148	31-Dec-07/12:24 AM
Thanks .... Is my poems that much enchanting......Thanks for your appreciation
Re: Absorb by Skamper	Dovina 208.127.216.46	30-Dec-07/2:33 PM
Answer: Soak it up and spit it out. Good philosophy.
Re: Running Local by INTRANSIT	Dovina 208.127.216.46	30-Dec-07/2:29 PM
Trucker terms, or Greek, who knows. I cycle with the biggest, rumba with the Macs. Parkour stumps me. Please, not over a fence. Fly ball and swerve on - I wont ask. Now, elope for a few on the server, I like. When ignorant, vote 7.
Re: a comment on Shiver by Skamper	Dovina 208.127.216.46	30-Dec-07/1:56 PM
I plead insanity!
Re: Absorb by Skamper	INTRANSIT 69.23.157.197	29-Dec-07/6:08 AM
Strange to see you use -'cos. I don't know why. Good thing you didn't use crumpet. Those things, sheesh. I like the paralells but, I think if you sit on it for a while, there's more to be brought out.9 for what it is now.
Re: who wansa do that? by malpaso	Skamper 58.171.135.99	28-Dec-07/11:44 PM
As much as I enjoy the short poem, due to lack of true inteligence...I can't seem to get a handle on this one. There's no oomph or moment of clarity, or nod, or small smile, or any of the things that brings instant understanding of what your saying, that should come with shorter writes. "You wanna go do somethin'?" sighs "Nah" - boredom, apathy...a statement, but is it poetry? hmmm?
Re: Sosomizing My Way Into Heaven by Bachus	SupremeDreamer 69.236.68.172	28-Dec-07/11:38 PM
Despicable and utterly delightful. Those saved for a dead god musn't be wasted. That would be a real sin that should be prevented.
Re: a comment on A-looky here. by malpaso	Skamper 58.171.206.156	28-Dec-07/11:37 PM
oh duh! Of course it does...I can be dense...and I knew I had commented on this one, but it seems to have disappeared.
Re: a comment on Shiver by Skamper	Skamper 58.171.194.152	28-Dec-07/11:34 PM
swapping to competing existances reads to me like a race, rather than a statement of how it is. fingers driven explains the fingers are being driven by something without his control whereas driven fingers, to me, seems to imply he has control. hyphen dropped as well as line 14... 13 stays, I like it. :) Thanks for the input - well appreciated as always.
Re: Amphetamine Witches & Scrabble by Bachus	SupremeDreamer 69.236.68.172	28-Dec-07/11:33 PM
Debased soul in the devine body of methylated illusion.
Re: a comment on Shiver by Skamper	Skamper 58.171.196.234	28-Dec-07/11:25 PM
I wanted to be spare - create the energy of serial killing, the need and driving ambition of it, as coldly as possible. The line is 'creating monuments' not moments.
Re: Day Dream by Jessina	Jessina 203.199.41.148	28-Dec-07/4:17 AM
very very nice
Re: Milk and gas by Caducus	malpaso 70.233.147.22	27-Dec-07/5:18 PM
outstanding!!!
Re: Suicide Note(I Blame Me) by alvinb	LynnJR 205.142.108.5	27-Dec-07/1:20 PM
Good poem, a little melodramatic in spots, but overall portrayed with depth and emotion. The rhyme scheme was pretty good, "All my agony mist" seemed a little awkward and "black as a pit" a little cliche(ic), I loved the line "all that were left was memory's last breath" - Good job on this.
Re: Flickering Eyes by Jessina	Prince of Void 77.237.65.86	27-Dec-07/8:46 AM
The dream that has changed world The dream had snowed my mind Where the shining was about to reflect beyond On the mount of where the divinity was born The infinity of love has fathomed all horizons The exitance was not contained of this world The world Where these two worlds’ve been lost It’s time my longing eyes are raining my heart And my lips are kissing my soul to fly away To where it belongs as it’s following the dove but my love is still trying to keep world away from wars making all decayding days from fears making that dream fade away in this human greed just ashes will remain nothing more than a fist can be gained once there was a heart now there is love last forever The love is giving the peace to those seekers of peace and love Mery christmas ...and thanx for ur comments and also ur beautiful poems has enchanted my mind and my heart
Re: a comment on This Poetry Thing by LynnJR	LynnJR 66.122.165.195	26-Dec-07/1:31 PM
thanks for reading - not sure what to make out of a critique or remark that says "bang" but thanks for your time.