on she wonders, by <~>
22 Oct 2002, 4:59 AM
I've come back to this. Will he dare? He would have to, wouldn't he? Or what kind of a man is he?
on Mystery on the Bridge by vulcan
23 Oct 2002, 1:35 AM
This is very tender and I like the rhetorical flourish of the last couplet.
on Strong by little_angel_maria
23 Oct 2002, 6:04 AM
But Maria does have a point - it's OK to dislkie someone's poem but people do go a bit crzy with abuse. That's just not necessary. AFter all, a person's only written a poem you don't like, they haven't petrol-bombed your house and drowned your kittens in a vat of teir own urine. But maybe I'm just saying this because Ealing isn't far from my home and I don't want Maria and Blade coming over to whack me.
on some deleted poem
23 Oct 2002, 6:05 AM
This is rather amusing.
on some deleted poem
23 Oct 2002, 6:08 AM
It is indeed frivolous and arch, but a bit too long. It's like Oscar Wilde after one creme de menthe too many.
on some deleted poem
23 Oct 2002, 6:12 AM
I like this - your verse is very musical. All your poetry has this precious quality; I think that you probably spend a lot of time polishing your words. Perhaps too much? It would be nice to see your verse breathe a bit more. Nonetheless, this is impressive.
on some deleted poem
23 Oct 2002, 6:15 AM
Jesus, by the time I'd read all the comments I'd forgotten what the poem was about. So I reread... good Viking stuff. May you bestirde Hrothgar, and all that.
on The Canvassers by Nicholas Jones
23 Oct 2002, 1:30 AM
I like the sense of compromise that comes over in this. I wonder if it should be 'On streets' not 'By streets' - do you say that doors are 'by' streets? Dunno. I'm a pedant. I like the 'metaphysical concrete dreams'.
on The Dreamer by Nicholas Jones
23 Oct 2002, 1:33 AM
Good to see another sonnet from you - you handled it well in 'The Canvassers' and also in this. This is more Keatsian as well in its self-analysis and fear.
on some deleted poem
22 Oct 2002, 7:35 AM
Break the cycle if you can, don't let yourself be used. A horrible situation
on Stockport by Nicholas Jones
22 Oct 2002, 4:51 AM
Excellent detail about the fashions of the 90s, and a great mordant ending. This is one of your toppermost.
on some deleted poem
22 Oct 2002, 4:52 AM
Last line- perfect. Tinkering does pay off.
on requiem for an ex-girlfriend by natalie
22 Oct 2002, 1:15 AM
I like th fact that the jealousy is still the most prevalent emotion, even at the end. But it's mixed in with shick, guilt and regret as well. That's a lot to cover in a short space.
on A love of the midlands by ==Doylum
22 Oct 2002, 1:18 AM
Where are you coming from? Telford should be European City of Culture. It's got bridges, after all. And a tree.
on Hedgehog's Dilemma by Shin-Bojangles
21 Oct 2002, 8:06 AM
Er, what? I'm baffled. Perhaps you had to be there.
on some deleted poem
21 Oct 2002, 8:10 AM
'There is abundance enough to last the season'? Oh, i don't know. I think the last line reads OK as it is, I didn't pick up on it as Zzinnia did.
on d e e p e r by daniella
21 Oct 2002, 6:10 AM
I've just realised I forgot to vote on this - sorry! Here you are...
on nothing could by nentwined
21 Oct 2002, 6:20 AM
Cunningly funny