on some deleted poem
17 Oct 2002, 4:06 AM
As someone who falls over at least once a day, I can literally feel your pain.
on Snow-White by vulcan
17 Oct 2002, 5:55 AM
I'm taking it that the 'Sole' refers to the solitary?
on Bleeding V2 by INTRANSIT
18 Oct 2002, 1:54 AM
I like the fact that you follow the fishing metaphor all the way through now, and I like the approaching menace of the bears at the end.
on Stamp by worldsofwar
18 Oct 2002, 1:55 AM
'generally a cheap tramp'?
on Ode to Larkbeat Twoshoes by Nicholas Jones
18 Oct 2002, 6:09 AM
I liek the reminiscence and the ending of the poem, but i don't know about the beginning - maybe it seems a bit wordy, and I don't quite see the connection between Vick and you becoming a 'person you can love'. The conversational tone of the rest of it is ace though. And Larkbeat Twoshoes is a fantastic name.
on the girl what gave scott the look by UAFANTHORPEY
18 Oct 2002, 6:12 AM
Your mate Scott is an idiot.
on The Devil Made Her Do It by Limness
17 Oct 2002, 1:31 AM
My limited knowledge of tarot doesn't help me here, but I think she's decided to cool off her relationship with some chap? what is the significance if inverting the last card? Pleasedo explain because I think it'll clear up the poem for me - it has your usual grace and swing.
on Confessor's Nightcap by Limness
17 Oct 2002, 1:28 AM
I don't know what it is - maybe it's the time of morning - but I think this is hilarious. You have a sly style and I like it. 'If ears retained'etc is genius.
on some deleted poem
17 Oct 2002, 1:32 AM
Why have you resubmited this? Has it changed? I still love it.
on some deleted poem
17 Oct 2002, 1:33 AM
I still love this too - what's up with the resubmissions?
on On a chill morning by razorgrin
17 Oct 2002, 4:03 AM
What is this mad pedantry about cars/brooms whatever? Who cares? This poem would go on forever if there was a description of every single detail and by the end of it the reader would want to baste himself in his own tears of frustration and rage. Leave it as it is Razorgrin!
on The Moment of Elevation by vulcan
17 Oct 2002, 5:57 AM
I liek the idea of the union of Man and Nature even in destruction. That is truly Shelleyan. You do capture the Romantics very well.
on At my grandmother's aging sight by vulcan
17 Oct 2002, 5:58 AM
I think you keep on resubmitting this one - you must be doing edits I haven't noticed. The ending in particular is very strong.
on On a chill morning by razorgrin
16 Oct 2002, 7:39 AM
And you call my poem chilly? This is icy and sinister.
on some deleted poem
16 Oct 2002, 8:17 AM
This is more resigned than your poems usually are, not that this is a bad thing. Acceptance, I think, is what you're talking about here, the hopelessness of hope.
on Jerk ?? Circle by horus8
16 Oct 2002, 2:35 AM
Top T action in the first stanza, and good reference to the spork, an underrated utensil. Your eye for detail never fails.
on Homemade Greetings by jessicazee
16 Oct 2002, 2:42 AM
Harsh to all card makers! I have never before considered the ethics of greeting cards - this is sharp.
on Persephone by Lynn
16 Oct 2002, 8:24 AM
This is a great updating, and very funny. Well done.