on some deleted poem
3 Sep 2002, 7:01 AM
I like the implication of a back story to this
on some deleted poem
3 Sep 2002, 8:03 AM
This is very appealing and witty. I like it!
on some deleted poem
3 Sep 2002, 8:47 AM
all I can say is, when I looked at it, the cloud was straight and bony looking - tiny little knobbles like vertebrae connected by thinner links - it looked like a spine. A cast of a spine, maybe. I suppose support is one of the ideas, though, you're right there.
on some deleted poem
3 Sep 2002, 8:04 AM
Well, maybe it is my mood. It's a hot day over here today and it tends to overheat me a little... But alas, just going home tonight.
on some deleted poem
3 Sep 2002, 8:19 AM
Why thank you Anais Nin!
on some deleted poem
3 Sep 2002, 8:31 AM
Yes - in the manner of Colette's husband I shall hawk your erotic wares around my slathering friends. They made a fortune, you know.
on The Hand of God by Christof
3 Sep 2002, 8:41 AM
It's good to be an island of Englishness, although I think I miss out on a lot of references. It's an education. Glad you liked the poem.
on some deleted poem
3 Sep 2002, 4:16 AM
In answer to your long-ago queston... I think the lines that make her sound needy begin 'She'll cry uncle...' to '...brutal charms'. Uncles conjure up an idea of warmth, confort, affectiotion, which is sublimated in this poem to the woman's desire for something harder and more animal - but the avuncular overtone is still there. There's an emotional as well as a sexual neediness here. But I wouldn't change it - that kind of need is part of sex. This is damn sexy stuff, m'dear.
on Another Window by nightii
3 Sep 2002, 5:23 AM
I agree, this is pleasingly sardonic.
on Diminishing by <~>
3 Sep 2002, 6:46 AM
I don't know how I missed this one before - it doesn't contain your best lines, but the design is ingenious
on some deleted poem
3 Sep 2002, 7:06 AM
I don't really understand what's going on here, this is too allusive. But your phrasing is good (it is in Donna's Eyes too).
on some deleted poem
3 Sep 2002, 7:14 AM
That is lovely,what a paradise and how selfless it sounds.
on School (a sonnet) by Nicholas Jones
3 Sep 2002, 7:20 AM
But I take it you learnt sonnet structure at school - so it wasn't all pointless then was it? Again, I can't agree with your conclusion, and I think this is melodramatic at the end and no half as interesting as 'Evensong'.
on some deleted poem
3 Sep 2002, 7:40 AM
OK I'm learning here - I've never heard of this game or a nuggie! I thought it was something much more psychosexual than it actually is! (What's a nuggie?)
on She Thinks Of Men Waiting by Christof
3 Sep 2002, 7:51 AM
Thanks Vulcan that means a lot. And best wishes to you!
on The Stifling Moment by vulcan
3 Sep 2002, 7:53 AM
You yourself have written a mean dmamn pice of poetry here. You can hear that hush.
on some deleted poem
3 Sep 2002, 7:58 AM
I recognise the nuggie but we have no word for it in England. Nuggie is pretty damn fine, actually. I also see how this particular game crosses over into the sexual play in your poem - there's another level there of instinctive child-like behaviour underlying adult behaviour. I think this is becoming my favourite poem of yours. And did you mean to finish on a comma?
on The Stifling Moment by vulcan
3 Sep 2002, 7:59 AM
And sorry for 'dmamn' - I meant 'damn'. This is great anyway.
on some deleted poem
3 Sep 2002, 4:34 AM
God, my typing, sorry....
on Evensong by Nicholas Jones
3 Sep 2002, 7:12 AM
I don't agree with your conclusion. Of course we have an alternative - we don't have to belive in god or the Trinity if it seems untrue. But I believe it is true to you and your poem makes this clear. Some of it sounds like cut-up prose ('And the hymns/were disappointingly insipid.' - I don't catch any rhythm there) but the opening is very atmospheric - probably the best bit of the poem. This is a very interesting poem, plenty to think about.