| Re: Tennesee Waterfall by razorgrin |
22-Aug-02/7:10 AM |
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Hey, you've got me to thank for getting you on the 15 best poems list!
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| Re: Untitled by unknown |
22-Aug-02/6:34 AM |
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All your poems are on the same subject, using the same imagery and following the same present-tense progressionless structure. Try something different!
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| Re: Tennesee Waterfall by razorgrin |
22-Aug-02/6:30 AM |
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You are the mistress of the humorous haiku.
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| Re: Sleepy Geek by razorgrin |
22-Aug-02/4:06 AM |
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This is very funny. I know exactly how you feel. We obviously have the same neighbours.
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| Re: Sunshine by alexander |
22-Aug-02/3:28 AM |
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That's a very sanguine/innocent response to having your roof blown off - I like it.
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| Re: The Precious Thing by -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. |
22-Aug-02/2:46 AM |
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Bizarrely, I find this quite moving as well as funny.
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| Re: would i be considered crazy by silvertongueddevil |
22-Aug-02/2:32 AM |
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Sorry guys, i don't know why my computer sent that four times....
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| Re: Dear Ms. Sexton by <{Baba^Yaga}> |
22-Aug-02/2:27 AM |
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So it is song lyrics? Well funny. I read that, I hear the rhythms, I hear the 'crash,boom,bam', the carnivals and lemonades and Doctors and it all sounds in my head like Tom Waits. It would be interesting to hear you actually sing it to pick up on the Buckley and Cohen slant.
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| Re: Jericho by goldfish |
22-Aug-02/2:08 AM |
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This is a very traditional poem on a very traditional subject. That said, the rhyming is really good - totally unforced, especially in the stanza discussing the marble and the rose - and the metre is flawlessy adhered to. I'm not so sure about the syntactical inversion ''Tis fair to in a brothel hide' though.It's 1798 all over again....
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| Re: Intense Irrational Realities by Venus |
22-Aug-02/2:02 AM |
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This is erotic as hell. You're a sly one, Venus. I like it.
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| Re: would i be considered crazy by silvertongueddevil |
22-Aug-02/1:57 AM |
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Definitely crazy but it makes a good poem. Some of the language in the second stanza is a bit stilted ('re-engage my interest in food' especially) but the idea is so compelling that it wins out.
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| Re: would i be considered crazy by silvertongueddevil |
22-Aug-02/1:56 AM |
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Definitely crazy but it makes a good poem. Some of the language in the second stanza is a bit stilted ('re-engage my interest in food' especially) but the idea is so compelling that it wins out.
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| Re: would i be considered crazy by silvertongueddevil |
22-Aug-02/1:56 AM |
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Definitely crazy but it makes a good poem. Some of the language in the second stanza is a bit stilted ('re-engage my interest in food' especially) but the idea is so compelling that it wins out.
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| Re: would i be considered crazy by silvertongueddevil |
22-Aug-02/1:55 AM |
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Definitely crazy but it makes a good poem. Some of the language in the econd stanza is a bit stilted ('re-engage my interest in food' especially) but the idea is so compelling that it wins out.
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| Re: Dear Ms. Sexton by <{Baba^Yaga}> |
22-Aug-02/1:40 AM |
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Bleeding hell, this has nothing to do with Memorybabe - I just thought that, while you might not like her poem very much, there was no need to be so brutal. Just who exactly do you think you are? But now I find out you think you're at least three people, and frankly I can't be arsed to deal with your semi-literate Roseanne Barr-like affectations.
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| Re: Various 7-Eleven hold ups... by Bachus |
22-Aug-02/1:25 AM |
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| Re: Dear Ms. Sexton by <{Baba^Yaga}> |
22-Aug-02/1:17 AM |
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OK, horus8/bachus/baba yaga, you win, I can't be bothered with this split identity thing any more, you just keep on ranting in your clever/remedial way and I'll steer round it and maybe we'll both be happy. And Dark Angel - would you prefer that I hate everything equally? Surely one of the points of criticism is that you discuss a single poem on its merits rather than swaggering in with a predetermined persona dispensing shards of ill-formed and meretricious nonsense? And I said Tom Waits because that's exactly what it sounds like. Did you take exception to that comment because you don't know what I'm talking about?
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| Re: Secret, Admirer by <~> |
21-Aug-02/9:01 AM |
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I preferred the first draft-it was more compact and immediate, and was suggestive rather than explicatory.
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| Re: cold sonnet by <~> |
21-Aug-02/8:26 AM |
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That's an interesting revision of sonnet form - no real regular rhyme scheme, shortening lines, but a final couplet to pull the whole together. 'Piney hearts' is very good.
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| Re: Making Sense in Plain Living by Flaithri |
21-Aug-02/6:34 AM |
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I didn't really understand the title and this sounds more like prose than poetry
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