"Mr Bloom walked unheeded along his grove by saddened angels, crosses, broken pillars, family vaults, stone hopes praying with upcast eyes, old Ireland's hearts and hands. More sensible to spend the money on some charity for the living." There, a piece of Joyce is read, probably enough. I'll start on the bathroom light, then sort by author. By the time you're back from the hospital, we'll be nearly done.

This is good, except for telling her what to do in the last two lines.

The Mother's Curse

A noise in the dark
I tremble in sheer terror -
An escaped son?

Great picture of growing up in the inner city.

I seems like a good start of something.

Yes, on singing your heart out. Like the irony of fools doing it too, or only, who cares. Nice.

I think the message would be clearer if you scratch these lines:

If fat is strong
and strong undesirable.
Why lose your chest
to show wasting legs?
She intimidates small men.

Line 3: "she envies girls" But it might be better using "you" all the way through.

What message does it impart? Weak.

I like the last line and wish all of the lines pointed to it. Most of them do, but not all.

Too much rhyme, not enough content.

Just a preachy thing that doesn't get at any of the problems you say "we" must solve.

I like the "fragrances triggered by sounds" verse. I don't know if these are things found written in the margin a a Bible or if the blades of grass and flowers are foung pressed there. Still, I like the touch of my eyes upon these words

Missing someone. Not very well told.

Verses 1&2 are what marriage of an experienced couple is. I like it a lot, can laugh with it. Christ seems extra though.

When they conceive a subtle light and give birth to charisma, I'm guessing, but there's chemistry in the now and was.

The rare rain is a good metaphor for something, and nicely described, but I'm loseing what it is. And who is Miguel Antonio Francis?

In spite of a dozen or more spelling and grammar problems, I think I got the point.

Except for a few spelling errors, this is cute.

I'm very tired after reading this. Love "singular audience of its intoxicant play."

"lungs" might better be "thoughts"
comma after "earth"
What is arenation?

If you really mean this, then you'd better take a hard look at this relationship. Is he wise because of words of affirmation? One line does seem true: "fantasies saturating my head." A 6 for heartfelt infatuation.

What a narrow ledge we walk. A life on one side, his attention on the other, wanting both. If I were doing what you're doing, and I have, I'd be better off if someone said, "Get off your butt."