on Go now if you want it. by Fayt
7 May 2005, 6:55 AM
"Faith in the face of light" is the basis of all such hocus-pocus. I hope you mean this as satire.
on a way to pass time by unknown^user
7 May 2005, 6:40 AM
He says its good because you've written about him, his world, no longer listening, indefinite, but still real. Hey, this really is good. I've raised my vote.
on some deleted poem
7 May 2005, 6:43 AM
Scratch the first 4 lines and put a comma after "ago"
on Dying breed by INTRANSIT
10 May 2005, 12:06 PM
Either everyone is misinterpreting this or I am. We have here, as I see it, a political statement in favor of truck drivers with some poetry added, and pretty good poetry to boot. I think you could lose the last two lines.
on some deleted poem
10 May 2005, 11:14 AM
Putting a poet in charge of an open mic reading is the most irresponsible act ever conceived. These events should be controlled rigorously by the government.
on some deleted poem
10 May 2005, 11:24 AM
The best line is "the night seethed with truth and lies"
on May Flowers by oneglove
10 May 2005, 1:37 PM
Is it about some May flowers visible in the neon lights at night, and worth the drive?
on Finding Gin and Santa by richa
10 May 2005, 11:47 AM
Funny, mocking the séance, but not to some.
on The cry of the Locust by nothingtoanyone
10 May 2005, 12:59 PM
Overwritten for what it says.
Why introduce the King James English?
The last line is good.
Why introduce the King James English?
The last line is good.
on some deleted poem
10 May 2005, 1:08 PM
"mother naked"
It's understated, as a political statment should be.
You have not abused the system because you get four poems for being new. From here on out, you can only post once in 48 hours.
It's understated, as a political statment should be.
You have not abused the system because you get four poems for being new. From here on out, you can only post once in 48 hours.
on Lake Michigan by jessicazee
10 May 2005, 1:16 PM
I don't see how the weatherman forces you to trust. It's all about probabilities. Also, Doppler is a short-time-range tool and does little to predict "rain all week."
"gladdened cancer tales" is good.
"gladdened cancer tales" is good.
on Anniversary by Hallmark
10 May 2005, 1:24 PM
This is very funny. It may not sell many cards, but it's good.
on My Life by sleeping monk
10 May 2005, 5:33 PM
I don't think of my life in the comfortable times between being awake.
on Covering the white house by INTRANSIT
12 May 2005, 11:45 AM
Somehow the title and the last line are alien to to the rest. Otherwise funny.
on On the Bank of Lake Michigan by jessicazee
12 May 2005, 12:03 PM
Is an alwife a fish that spawns on the beach of Lake Michigan? The last line needs some help.
on The Observer by Jeremi B. Handrinos
12 May 2005, 12:10 PM
It tackles too many topics in the second half to be strong in any of them. Would do better to stick with the "I can influence the future" theme.
on sixth and highland by unknown^user
12 May 2005, 12:14 PM
I don't get it.