The last line tells more than needed. A long and wordy story, but pleasing in a fairytale way.

Why offset the last line?

Beware of the ten-vote and the opposite comment. Too many commas. "Smell filled with perfume" is wordy and redundant. "happy and rejoiced" sounds funny. To feel one with nature is to use a cliche. Some good ideas needing better words.

Title sounds like a master's thesis. "hands on my heart" - like it. S2 - why not leave out the The"'s? "beloved" sounds archaic in this context.

Da's 10-vote either means he loves it and his comment oxymononic, or it means he hates it and his vote is to keep you off the Worst List, or he thinks 0 is higher than 10.

It's hard to know if you're making fun of this meeting-God-and-answering-to-him stuff or if you're literal. If you're really preaching, then get rid of the cliches and state your case in plain English. No vote until I know which.

What makes you think you can slither away without a word, and come waltzing back a month later without so much as a flimsy explanation. I'm melted by "special thanks" though and can only say, Welcome Back.

This is a very funny take-off on "A Better God" and also quite profound if you want to open discussions on whether such a god exists, and if so, whether he sends hurricanes, earhtquakes and plagues in anger. Your last two lines pretty well sum up where such discussions end.

A house is a house is a house,
An ended thing an' black.
But why not "and" and "B"?

Explaining a poem is like calling it a riddle. I prefer to glean what I can without explanation. You could title it "Child Abuse," since your title is redundant anyway. Using King James English detracts unless you are consistant. Grammetical problems in lines 5, 8, and line 3 of S2. Good use of the tic Overuse of the wrath of god, unless you do more with it than say it four times. A lot of criticism? Yeah, but I agree with what you're saying.

From the last 3 lines, her son died as a baby. It's a moving picture as is, but, I'd have preferred to know this sooner.

"very Horrendous" is the same as horrendous, and why capitalize it. "I think much like Nothing About You" means something, but what?

You never saw this kinda thing happen when the Democrats were running the country.

Next caller please.
And by god, this better be good!

Just open a channel and collect whatever comes accross the airwaves.

A prose poem always flounders, by definition, an indecicive thing looking for a home between the ramble of a short story and the concision of a poem. Seldom do prose poets space out their lines this much. In the end I think it flows pretty well, which is just a feeling, based on nothing logical. But I do wish you'd make up your mind.

The first verse nicley evokes a sad tale coming, except for the rogue comma. I love openings like this.

Is it a heron or an egret? They're about the same, right?

If you're going to post a revision, at least correct the spelling!

I'll say something now that you've revised it to where an ordinary American thinks she understands. The arguement that turning clocks back in the fall for farmers in northern latitudes is hogwash. They don't work the fields during winter, so how does a time change help them? Arizona has the right plan - no plan at all. I think you could have said it tighter and with more impact by leaving out haggis and gristle.

No on 1 and 2. No on most of the ballot propositions today. The pumpkin idea holds up pretty well.

"Rainbow after a grim shower" just doesn't work, but neither does the last verse, and "methinks" doesn't fit either. Sorry.