Comments byDovina, 3021–3040 back, including replies. Only comments on poems

replying on Middle-Aged White Woman by Dovina 16 Apr 2005, 11:04 AM
Again, you did not listen, or having sistened, decided to ignore the simple effect of my words in favor of outlandish interpretatioins. To wit:

1) Wrongs against blacks are not in some vague past, but are facts of history.

2) Certain Blacks today have enough power that they can oppress whites if they want to. I have been the victim of one such event and wrote the poem in its memory.

3) I not only think that this particular Black wanted to, but heard him say so.

4) I have no place in Black culture and never said that I do.

5) I never said that I thought that, and do not think it.
on wonder by the_poetess 14 Apr 2005, 4:18 PM
Our wonder will stay right where it is.
on Freedom by shadows 14 Apr 2005, 4:16 PM
Freedom is not realizing that the masses are safer without it.
on believing by whispern_smoke_wisp 14 Apr 2005, 4:04 PM
Why do you expect that a god we all decide to believe in will bring peace? How many of the others have brought peace?
on Looking Over the Blueprints by somemorepoetry 14 Apr 2005, 7:19 AM
If he were truly an architect, he would not refer to his prints by the antiquated "blueprints" or draw their originals with compas and straight edge, but with CAD.
on Judgement by Damien 14 Apr 2005, 7:03 AM
It is good to write without the restraints of grammar. After doing so, it is good to read what what you have written as someone else might, just to see if it is clear. Ususlly, clarity and grammar go together, but not always. I think this is clear
replying on Middle-Aged White Woman by Dovina 14 Apr 2005, 6:48 AM
A long time ago I thought you were reading what I said before bashing it. No I think you just bash without reading.
replying on Middle-Aged White Woman by Dovina 13 Apr 2005, 6:25 AM
The poem could be interpreted as a didactic statement to that effect. I’m not up for it either. An incident like this shows me in a personal way what black people went through and in some cases are still going through. I am not willing to suffer retribution, however, for what I did not do.
replying on Middle-Aged White Woman by Dovina 12 Apr 2005, 8:54 PM
All things considered, you did not consider all things, especially not the poem, which never said anyone ignored me in his/her poetry. It is not a preposterous suggestion that one side's history of institutionalized oppression can be "balanced out" or "made up for" by black people whupping white ass for a while! It is exactly what happened in this case. Remember I'm describing a case, not a population.
replying on Middle-Aged White Woman by Dovina 12 Apr 2005, 8:48 PM
He ignored me, didn’t hire me, belittle me in his poetry,
skiped over me at his open mic reading. It's all sadly there.
on Perfect Answer by Alizarin_Crimson 12 Apr 2005, 7:43 AM
The last two lines change from contemplative to didactic. That is if you mean "Be cause." If that's what you want to do, and I hope is is not, then transition needed.
on Boulder Lake, Somewhere in Wisconsin by jessicazee 12 Apr 2005, 7:35 AM
Good, but a problem with tenses - "You said we’d go" in first sentence, then "Drive your red truck" in the second. Then back to "I'd" in the third.
replying on science by whispern_smoke_wisp 11 Apr 2005, 3:50 PM
As a memeber of this club, I do appologize for zodiac. He is quite annoying. However, you seem to be dodging the poem you have written by saying that you did not mean it. That's quite alright in most cases, but here I think you really did think that science had tried to squelsh some of the love between dog and human. If you did not think that, pray tell what you were thinking.
replying on Middle-Aged White Woman by Dovina 11 Apr 2005, 5:25 AM
It’s meant to be hurried. The entire poem is direct, non-ironic, and marches toward this simple ending. It’s an isolated case of racial prejudice and happened just as stated.
replying on Middle-Aged White Woman by Dovina 10 Apr 2005, 6:49 PM
1) The freedom, authority, and power many Black people have recieved in recent years.
2) No
3) Yes
4) No
5) No
6) Yes, see below
replying on Middle-Aged White Woman by Dovina 10 Apr 2005, 6:46 PM
I’m sorry to hear that.
replying on Middle-Aged White Woman by Dovina 10 Apr 2005, 6:46 PM
Almost all of the Black people I have encountered have treated me with respect. A few exceptions gave rise to this poem.
replying on Middle-Aged White Woman by Dovina 10 Apr 2005, 6:45 PM
Those people don’t know me very well either.
on a note on content by not_a_philosopher 9 Apr 2005, 10:51 AM
please, at least make it clear what you are getting at, so that if your only goal is to sound nice, people will know it.
on a journey by the_poetess 9 Apr 2005, 10:49 AM
The first five lines are good, but then it wanders in bad grammar: (you lips are chapped) and (milk for you drink) The last line is only vaguely supported.