Comments byDovina, 3341–3360 back, including replies. Only comments on poems

replying on Hunger 2 by Dovina 1 Mar 2005, 11:48 AM
That’s what we call in the trade a cliché, old hat, trite, obvious when it was first said, boring then, boring now.

Hey mofo, what about the poem?
on In My Arms by jroday 1 Mar 2005, 9:03 AM
Drop the first line, since it's the same as the title, and change "mine" to "mind" in Line 3. Also, some of the punctuation is not needed. Otherwise pretty good.
on For Junior by PodPoet 1 Mar 2005, 7:46 AM
Beware!
replying on Hunger by Dovina 1 Mar 2005, 7:37 AM
Yes, I am insane.
replying on It’s the Management by Dovina 1 Mar 2005, 7:34 AM
You've said all that unsupported blather before, but it's always good to hear it again.
replying on It’s the Management by Dovina 28 Feb 2005, 9:06 PM
As told to me by a man in a bar who was in the WTC on that day and followed his boss down the stairs with ten other employees. How could it be otherwise?
replying on Hunger 2 by Dovina 28 Feb 2005, 2:42 PM
Thank you so much for your confidence in my work evidenced by only now noticing a cracking (of course, no pun intended), but I have not cracked, unless trying new ways of expression is a kind of insanity.
replying on Hunger 2 by Dovina 28 Feb 2005, 2:42 PM
He who has eyes to see, let him see.
replying on Hunger 2 by Dovina 28 Feb 2005, 2:33 PM
LISP, the language of AutoCad and other graphic applications.
replying on It’s the Management by Dovina 28 Feb 2005, 2:32 PM
lol, but no.
replying on It’s the Management by Dovina 28 Feb 2005, 2:31 PM
I made the boss man male because he is a man. I believe I could have written it with a woman boss, but that's not the way it was. Could you have written this story with either gender as protagonist or would you just let it pass if the boss were a woman?
replying on Hunger by Dovina 28 Feb 2005, 2:22 PM
You make it much more complecated than it is. Both of your suggestions are much too difficult.
replying on Hunger by Dovina 28 Feb 2005, 4:41 AM
Cerebral slop. So many words for so little content. Please strive for brevity.
on Ode by James Rykelangeli 27 Feb 2005, 6:31 AM
Very funny and nicely done. It makes me laugh at myself. Welcome to Poemranker.
on How Do I Become a Poet? (with John B. Benitez) by Vince Dolamando 27 Feb 2005, 6:25 AM
Poetry is something you read after you have written it and eliminated the obvious mistakes. It's a fine point I know, but try to master it.
on Homecoming Parade by wilco 27 Feb 2005, 6:05 AM
Thought provoking. I can hear it with an acoustic guitar from a coffee house stool. Not bad.
replying on It’s the Management by Dovina 27 Feb 2005, 5:55 AM
A blatant and predictably sexist response.
on As The Days Turn to Months by DevilBuni 26 Feb 2005, 5:24 PM
The first 2 verses say it all and pretty well. Consider dropping the last.
replying on Rough Translation (Prose) by William Alfaro 26 Feb 2005, 5:18 PM
That link - it's a good read.
replying on It’s the Management by Dovina 26 Feb 2005, 7:05 AM
I'm gonna repost it, and make it clearer.