replying on The Rocketsâ Song by Dovina
17 Dec 2004, 2:29 PM
Please carry on. Youâre right in character now.
replying on The Rocketsâ Song by Dovina
17 Dec 2004, 1:52 PM
I almost didn't, then thought I might offend your senibilities with the antiquated Superman or Batman. I try to be polite that way, even while considering all of them on a par. I find nothing collossal about it.
replying on The Rocketsâ Song by Dovina
17 Dec 2004, 1:09 PM
Iâm sure you mean the team was desperate, not âwere desperate.â And another thing: Saying someone is colossally wrong and a fool over trivial differences among the superheroes is a trait of -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. that is overused. The team should consider revising such abuse of superlatives because it discredits the times when he says someone is colossally wrong, and the person really is. I remain available for consultation on matters such as this, and more so when spoken to with at least minimal decency. :)
replying on The Downfall of a Pagan Man by somemorepoetry
16 Dec 2004, 8:10 PM
Still a good read. I don't know what you've changed or what a lot of of it means, but it's an Iliad feeling to saunter through it.
replying on A friend told me by RION12
16 Dec 2004, 1:19 PM
How can something be called truly poetic? Is that different trom or better than poetic? This poem has a good theme with a lot of chunky language.
The rules of Haiku are precise, and this is not Haiku. Please call it Free Verse. It sounds like an opening statement in need of support or illustration, and capitalization of "Him." Often, when I comment on a religious poem, people think I am putting down the religion, but in this case I am not, only the way it's presented.
replying on The Rocketsâ Song by Dovina
16 Dec 2004, 1:01 PM
If youâd been paying attention, you would have known that this has already been covered and recovered. Does anyone really not understand the fictitious -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I., his extreme arrogance, the preposterous higher order of human in which he asserts himself as if innately better, his obsession with demeaning the lower classes and instilling what he hopes to be pain? Does anyone not suspect he is the embodiment of thwarted lives seeking betterment through a Superman or Spiderman. Collaborate if you will in producing him. The project might even attract me if the character were not so obnoxious. Itâs a fine fantasy you have, but for godâs sake, read the othersâ posts. Itâs like talking to an Alzheimerâs victim who may or may not remember our last conversation.
replying on The Rocketsâ Song by Dovina
16 Dec 2004, 12:57 PM
,including the other response to my comment, which is the epitome of pretentious self deception.
replying on The wreck of a Memphis-Atlanta Greyhound by zodiac
16 Dec 2004, 12:48 PM
Is there any wonder that I do not always believe you, even when you say, "you'll just have to take my word for it?" You've changed it some, mostly for the better, but how can I believe when you say, "if you believe . . " referring to half of you flying upward and half downward after you flew through a windshield, and then wrote about it?
replying on Many Thanks by Dovina
16 Dec 2004, 12:24 PM
I wanted the present tense here to show immediacy - a note being written in the cantina right after reading theirs.
replying on Fugitively Speaking by Dovina
16 Dec 2004, 12:19 PM
That depends on what you mean by "productive" and "think." Granted, this is a kind of thinking that aims at productivity of an unusual kind.
replying on Better Sex by Dovina
15 Dec 2004, 10:25 AM
Thank you. I'm glad you see it that way.
replying on Better Sex by Dovina
15 Dec 2004, 10:20 AM
They'd say I'm pathetic and should find moral friends and get over it and besides, I'm a dimtard to even name what he and I did sex.
replying on Better Sex by Dovina
15 Dec 2004, 10:17 AM
Call it respect, but I think it was the jitters with a tinge of disgust.
replying on Better Sex by Dovina
15 Dec 2004, 10:16 AM
I told you plenty!
on Forsaken Love by Blue Magpie
14 Dec 2004, 4:20 PM
The first three lines introduce a worthy theme, something I wanted to see evolve. But the rest is only music, I'm afraid, good rhythm and rhyme. I enjoy music, but far more when it carries something.
on Oh well, shit happens by sir_heff
14 Dec 2004, 10:41 AM
How can a friend be un-bias (unbiased)?
Do you mean to call her a witch?
Do you mean to call her a witch?
replying on The Rocketsâ Song by Dovina
13 Dec 2004, 3:40 PM
Why do I feel no pain over this? Oh yes, it's because my Naturalizer pumps are both comfortable and stylish.